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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to AshdownMuseum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods Summaris v.2

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to AshdownMuseum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods Summaris v. 2
The table and the chart compare the total of the Ashdown Museum’s guests and their satisfaction throughout the year before and after it was renovated. Overall, the total of visitor increased slightly, and dissatisfied of people become fewer based the survey. After the improvement work, the museum got 92, 000 visitant over the first year which grew from 74, 000 in the last year before the restoration. Additionally, there was a small rise on visitor’s comfort which stood at 35% previous to refurbishment but climbed 40%. Likewise, the rate of people who felt very satisfied went up significantly by 20% which reached 35% of the total. On the other hand, before the development customer’s disappointment was initially 40% then, it went down massively to just 15% over the year after the renewal. Similarly, the percentage of guests who were very displeased also dropped, which leveled out 5% from 10%. Finally, respondents with no reply remained at 5% before and after the repair of the museum.
The table and the chart compare the total of the
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92, 000 visitant over the
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which grew from 74, 000 in the last
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before
the restoration.
Additionally
, there was a
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rise on visitor’s comfort which stood at 35% previous to refurbishment
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climbed 40%.
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, the rate of
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people
who felt
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satisfied went up
significantly
by 20% which reached 35% of the total.

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,
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before
the development customer’s disappointment was
initially
40% then, it went down
massively
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15% over the
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year
after the renewal.
Similarly
, the percentage of guests who were
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very
displeased
also
dropped, which leveled out 5% from 10%.
Finally
, respondents with no reply remained at 5%
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before
and after the repair of the museum.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the numbers of visitors to AshdownMuseum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods Summaris v. 2

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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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