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The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort v.2

The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort v. 2
The pictures illustrate the changing of fishing village in coastal area is becoming a recreation place in Europe. According to the picture, developing coastal area really significantly. In the past, the area was just the small village to fisherman but after the period of time, many of high buildings and real estate is getting busier and many villagers step aside to other location. In the beginning, the fishing village had a few residential area, there was large woodland at the left side where was close to farmland and near from housing area there was a harbor. At the top of picture, the area was still natural where was a few building built in there. Over the years, the coastal area changing a lot where the surroundings of residential area is becoming a lot of commercial areas. There are many buildings replace the natural place around the village, like skyscraper, supermarket and apartment. The harbor is demolished and it changed recreation area while, the woodland is destroyed. In the top of picture, there is new village which build near a mountain and the distance is 10 miles from residential area so there has a main street which connected between to areas.
The
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pictures
illustrate the changing of fishing
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village
in coastal
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area
is becoming a recreation place in Europe.

According to the
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picture
, developing coastal
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area
really
significantly
. In the past, the
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area
was
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just
the
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small
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village
to fisherman
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but
after the period of time,
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many
of high buildings and real estate is getting busier and
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many
villagers step aside to other location.

In the beginning, the fishing
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village
had a few residential
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area
, there was large woodland at the
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left
side where was close to farmland and
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near from housing
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area
there was a harbor. At the top of
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picture
, the
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area
was
still
natural where was a few building built in there.

Over the years, the coastal
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area
changing a lot where the surroundings of residential
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area
is becoming
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a lot of
commercial
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areas
. There are
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many
buildings replace the natural place around the
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village
, like skyscraper, supermarket and apartment. The harbor
is demolished
and it
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changed
recreation
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area
while, the woodland is
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destroyed
. In the top of
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picture
, there is new
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village
which build near a mountain and the distance is
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10 miles
from residential
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area
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so
there has a main street which connected between to
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areas
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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