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The table below shows the numbers of visitor to ashdowm. Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period the sam v.2

The table below shows the numbers of visitor to ashdowm. Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period the sam v. 2
The charts reveals that information of represention the number of visitor to ashdowm museum as well as the year before and the year after it was refurbished. It is gives two charts. The tabular chart and circular chart. Moving a quick glance on the illustration, the year before refubishment number of visitors to ashdowm museum in 74, 00 but then due the after year refusbishment are more than fall up number of visitors to ashdowm museum in 92, 000. On the flip side, the pie chart the result of survey of visitor satisfaction. Hence, few year back, the dissatisfied was higher visitor stisfaction in 40and nearly by declined was very staisfied in 30. Afterthat, the no respone the surveys of visitor satisfaction was very reduced proportion in 5. Otherwise, after year rufurbishment was boomed in very satisfied and satisfied increased the ratio was equal serveys of visitor satisfaction in 35 to 45. Last, the no response the dwellers was the very dissatisfied are same proprotion in 5. To sum up, during the year after refusbishment are rose in 92, 000. Then, in the before year and after year are equal ratio in satisfied 30 to 35.
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ashdowm
museum
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after it
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. It is gives two
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. The tabular
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and circular chart.

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year
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before
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refubishment
number of
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visitors
to
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ashdowm
museum in 74, 00
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then due the after
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year
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refusbishment
are more than fall up number of
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visitors
to
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ashdowm
museum in 92, 000.

On the flip side, the pie
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the result of survey of
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visitor
satisfaction.
Hence
, few
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year
back, the dissatisfied was higher
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visitor
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stisfaction
in 40and
nearly
by declined was
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very
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staisfied
in 30.
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, the no
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rufurbishment
was boomed
in
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very
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satisfaction in 35 to 45. Last, the no response the dwellers was the
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proprotion
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after
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refusbishment
are rose in 92, 000. Then, in the
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before
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and after
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are equal ratio in satisfied 30 to 35.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the numbers of visitor to ashdowm. Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period the sam v. 2

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4 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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