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the first chart below show the number of British visitors to the US and Ameican visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by tose visitors in that period v.2

the first chart below show the number of British visitors to the US and Ameican visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by tose visitors in that period v. 2
The first bar chart depicts the changes in the number of British visitors to US and American visitors to UK between 2011 and 2015, the second bar chart compares how much spent of those tourists in each countries during this period. As an overview, it is clearly seen that the rate of British tourists to US was higher than the rate of American tourists to UK over the 5 years period. The amount spent by UK tourists was much more the US visitors at the same time. According to the first chart, the number of visitors from British come to UK dipped slightly from 2011 to 2013 and hit the low of 2, 9 billion people in 2013, but it increased and reached the highest point of 3, 5 billion people in the end of this period. While the number of American visitors remained almost stable at nearly 2, 8 billion people during the first 2 years. In the third year of this report, this number hit the lowest point of 2 billion people, then it increased gradually to 3, 2 billion people in the last year. In the second chart, an upward trend was seen in how much spent by the UK tourist from 2011 to 2015, it increased slightly over 3-year period, but rose gradually from 4, 1 billion dollar to totally 5. 8 billion dollar in the end of this period. By contrast, the amount spent by US tourists was nearly flat from 2011 to 2013, but there was some slightly changes in the two years last, it increased from stable amount at about 3 billion dollar to 4 billion dollar. The gap between the UK and US tourists had widened gradually at the end of the period.
The
first
bar
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chart
depicts the
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changes
in the
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number
of British
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visitors
to US and American
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visitors
to UK between 2011 and 2015, the second bar
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chart
compares how much
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spent
of those
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tourists
in each
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countries
during this period.

As an overview, it is
clearly
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seen
that the rate of British
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tourists
to US was higher than the rate of American
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tourists
to UK over the 5 years
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period
. The amount
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spent
by UK
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tourists
was much more the US
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visitors
at the same time.

According to the
first
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chart
, the
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number
of
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visitors
from British
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come
to UK dipped
slightly
from 2011 to 2013 and hit the low of 2, 9
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billion
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people
in 2013,
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but
it
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increased
and reached the highest point of 3, 5
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billion
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people
in the
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end
of this
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period
. While the
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number
of American
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visitors
remained almost stable at
nearly
2, 8
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billion
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people
during the
first
2 years. In the third
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year
of this report, this
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number
hit the lowest point of 2
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billion
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people
, then it
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increased
gradually
to 3, 2
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billion
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people
in the last year.

In the second
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chart
, an upward trend was
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seen
in how much
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spent
by the UK
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tourist
from 2011 to 2015, it
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increased
slightly
over
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3-year
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period
,
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but
rose
gradually
from 4, 1
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billion
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dollar
to
totally
5. 8
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billion
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dollar
in the
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end
of this
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period
. By contrast, the amount
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spent
by US
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tourists
was
nearly
flat from 2011 to 2013,
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but
there was
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some
slightly
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changes
in the two years last, it
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increased
from stable amount at about 3
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billion
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dollar
to 4
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billion
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dollar
. The gap between the UK and US
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tourists
had widened
gradually
at the
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end
of the
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period
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic the first chart below show the number of British visitors to the US and Ameican visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by tose visitors in that period v. 2

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4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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