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The chart below shows the resources used to make 1000 disposable cups in different materials polystyrene and paper v.2

The chart below shows the resources used to make 1000 disposable cups in different materials polystyrene and paper v. 2
The table illustrates the amount of different resources which is required to produce 1000 disposable polystyrene and paper cups. Overall, it is apparent that for producing a thousand of paper cups, all the given materials are used is higher than the polystyrene cups, except stem and other chemicals. On the other hand, there is no wood is used for making polystyrene cups. The highest amount of stem is required to make one thousand of polystyrene cups, and this amount is 130 kg, compared to the paper cups which required only 0. 56 kg. However, for making the polystyrene cups there is no wood is used, 220 kg of wood is required to make a thousand of paper cups. The use of electricity and petroleum for producing the paper cups is 13 and 3 times higher respectively than the polystyrene cups. While 10 meter cubes of water is needed for producing 1000 of paper cups, the polystyrene cups only required less than 1 meter cube. In contrast, 5 kg more other chemicals is used for the production of polystyrene cups.
The table illustrates the amount of
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to produce 1000 disposable polystyrene and paper cups.

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, it is apparent that for producing a thousand of paper
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, all the
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materials are
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is higher than the polystyrene
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cups
, except stem and other chemicals.
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for making polystyrene cups.

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one thousand of polystyrene
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cups
, and this amount is 130 kg, compared to the paper
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cups
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0. 56 kg.
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, for making the polystyrene
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cups
there is no wood is
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used
, 220 kg of wood is
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make
a thousand of paper
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. The
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use
of electricity and petroleum for producing the paper
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cups
is 13 and 3 times higher
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than the polystyrene
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. While
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, the polystyrene
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less than 1 meter cube.
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used
for the production of polystyrene
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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the resources used to make 1000 disposable cups in different materials polystyrene and paper v. 2

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179 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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