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the table below shows the number of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006 v.1

the table below shows the number of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006 v. 1
The tabular data depicts how many people worked in 4 certain divisions in the UK in 1998 and 2006. First of all, in 1998, the major proportion of young people (over 100, 000) preferred to work in building sector which kept on decreasing with age. The figures for this sector had fewer workers overall in 2006 though it retained a similar age profile to that of 1998. Similarly, in hotel and catering, the age of workers used to be much younger in 1998, with the majority of workers being under 35. In 2006, the majority of people were between 26 and 45, with more workers in the over-46 category ( four thousand more in each category) than in 1998 and fewer in under 25s. Whereas the other 2 workplaces had either a fluctuating or an increasing trend. Amongst them, the technology industry has seen an enormous change with substantially more workers now than in 1998, but the vast majority of these were still in the 26-35 age band which were under 65, 000 and around 450, 000 respectively). The numbers in education have not changed that much within each age category, although there are now fewer workers in the over-56 age group with a difference of over 20, 000 which became half. Overall, it can be seen that hotel and catering as well as building had dropped in the later ages and also in 2006. Whereas middle-aged people were preferring to work in technology and education field with the overall highest figure seen for technology for the 26-35 age group.
The tabular data depicts how
many
people
worked in 4 certain divisions in the UK in 1998 and 2006.

First of all
, in 1998, the major proportion of young
people
(over
100, 000) preferred to work in building sector which
kept
on decreasing with
age
. The figures for this sector had fewer
workers
overall
in 2006 though it retained a similar
age
profile to that of 1998.
Similarly
, in hotel and catering, the
age
of
workers
used
to be much younger in 1998, with the majority of
workers
being under 35. In 2006, the majority of
people
were between 26 and 45, with more
workers
in the
over-46
category
(
four thousand more in each category) than in 1998 and fewer in under 25s.

Whereas the other 2 workplaces had either a fluctuating or an increasing trend. Amongst them, the technology industry has
seen
an enormous
change
with
substantially
more
workers
now
than in 1998,
but
the vast majority of these were
still
in the 26-35
age
band which were under 65, 000 and around 450, 000
respectively
)
. The numbers in education have not
changed
that much within each
age
category, although there are
now
fewer
workers
in the
over-56
age
group with a difference of
over
20, 000 which became half.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that hotel and catering
as well
as building had dropped in the later
ages
and
also
in 2006. Whereas middle-aged
people
were preferring
to work in technology and education field with the
overall
highest figure
seen
for technology for the 26-35
age
group.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic the table below shows the number of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006 v. 1

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