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The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000. v.3

The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000. v. 3
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of internet users in Taiwan in three different age groups between 1998 and 2000. Overall, young internet users in Taiwan was remarkably higher than older internet users. It is clear that the highest internet user was the young age group (between 16 and 30 years), though the rate had decreased over the period, while the lowest was the junior population (aged below 15). In 1998, the highest population of internet users in Taiwan was the young people, as their figure was accounted for 53% of the total internet users. It dropped drastically to 44% in 2000. As for the middle age people (between 31 and 50 years), their figure had decreased slightly from 41% in 1998 to 37% in 2000. The senior people (aged 50 years and above) and the junior people figures’ were 4% and 2% 1998. As the senior people’s percentage grew by two-fold, the junior group rate also increased by 6% in 1999. And then both figures continued to increase as they reached 10% and 9% in 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of internet
users
in Taiwan in three
different
age groups between 1998 and 2000.
Overall
, young internet
users
in Taiwan was
remarkably
higher than older internet users.

It is
clear
that the highest internet
user
was the young age group (between 16 and 30 years), though the rate had decreased over the period, while the lowest was the junior population (aged below 15). In 1998, the highest population of internet
users
in Taiwan was the young
people
, as their
figure
was accounted
for 53% of the total internet
users
. It dropped
drastically
to 44% in 2000. As for the middle age
people
(between 31 and 50 years), their
figure
had decreased
slightly
from 41% in 1998 to 37% in 2000.

The senior
people
(aged 50 years and above) and the junior
people
figures
’ were 4% and 2% 1998. As the senior
people’s
percentage grew by two-fold, the junior group rate
also
increased by 6% in 1999. And then both
figures
continued to increase as they reached 10% and 9% in 2000.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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