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The graph below shows the rate of attendance for primary and secondary schools for boys and girls across the world v.2

The graph below shows the rate of attendance for primary and secondary schools for boys and girls across the world v. 2
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of students of both primary and secondary schools in three different countries such as industrialized countries, developing countries, and the least developed countries. At the onset, it is clear that girls, in primary school, have higher attendance compared to boys in industrialized countries, while the reverse is the case in developing countries. In secondary school, the percentage of boys and girls, in industrialized countries and developing countries is minimal in comparison to the least developed countries. Now, turning into the details, in primary school, the percentage of males attendance in industrialized countries is 96 %, while the proportion of females attendance in industrialized countries is 95%. Besides that, the portion of boys in developing countries, which accounts for 88%, is considerably higher than the rate of girls in developing countries, which makes up only 83%. However, the attendance of boys in the least developed countries is 6% higher than the attendance of girls. In the case of secondary school, the percentage of males and females in developed countries has almost doubled compared to the portion of males and females in developing countries. Finally, the percentage of girls from the least developed countries is 26%, which is 4% less than the rate of boys in the least developed countries.
The bar graph illustrates the
percentage
of students of both primary and secondary
schools
in three
different
countries
such as
industrialized
countries
,
developing
countries
, and the least
developed
countries.

At the onset, it is
clear
that
girls
, in primary
school
, have higher
attendance
compared to
boys
in
industrialized
countries
, while the reverse is the case in
developing
countries
. In secondary
school
, the
percentage
of
boys
and
girls
, in
industrialized
countries
and
developing
countries
is minimal
in comparison
to the least
developed
countries.

Now
, turning into the
details
, in primary
school
, the
percentage
of males
attendance
in
industrialized
countries
is 96 %, while the proportion of females
attendance
in
industrialized
countries
is 95%.
Besides
that, the portion of
boys
in
developing
countries
, which accounts for 88%, is
considerably
higher than the rate of
girls
in
developing
countries
, which
makes
up
only
83%.
However
, the
attendance
of
boys
in the least
developed
countries
is 6% higher than the
attendance
of girls.

In the case of secondary
school
, the
percentage
of males and females in
developed
countries
has almost doubled compared to the portion of males and females in
developing
countries
.
Finally
, the
percentage
of
girls
from the least
developed
countries
is 26%, which is 4% less than the rate of
boys
in the least
developed
countries
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the rate of attendance for primary and secondary schools for boys and girls across the world v. 2

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