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The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v.3

The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 3
The supplied table data presents information on the distance travelled by passengers in a European country in different modes of transportations from 1995 to 2015. As is given in the illustration, buses and rails were the most preferred transportation types but the air travel gained popularity in recent years. According to the given data, the least number of distance was travelled using bicycles and motorbikes by passengers in this European country. Commuters in this country travelled only 2 billion km. using bicycles in 1995 and it was the same in 2015. Similarly, only 5 billion km were travelled using motorbikes which reached 6 billion after 20 years. Interestingly, the air travels gained huge popularity in later years as 20 billion km distance was passed using aeroplanes in 2015 while this was merely 2 billion km 20 years earlier. Buses and trains were the most preferred transportation types as the highest distance was travelled by the passengers in these two modes of transportation. However, there was an increase in the distance travelled by trains (38  and 60 billion km in 2005 and 2015) while it decreased in the case of the bus (56 and 42 billion km in 2005 and 2015 respectively). The total distance travelled by passengers increased to 130 billion km. in 2015 in this country from 103 billion km. in 1995.
The supplied table data presents information on the
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from 1995 to 2015. As is
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transportation
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in this European
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and 60
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The total
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increased to 130
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 3

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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