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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. v.1

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. v. 1
The line graphs illustrate the variation of three types of crimes in Newport city centre over a 10-year period. In general, almost every crime rate fluctuated over the given period of time except burglary which showed an overall downward trend. Initially, in 2003, there were more cases of burglary (approximately 3400) than car theft (roughly 2800) and robbery (just above 500). Over the time frame, there were always more incidents of car theft than robbery whereas the number of incidents of burglary was higher than that of car theft from 2003 to 2006 and there was equal in the number of cases of burglary and car theft in the middle of the year 2006. From 2007 onwards, there were more cases of car theft than burglary, which is followed by robbery. There was a sharp dip in the number of incidents of car theft in 2006 (around 2100) before it continued to rise until the year of 2012. The number of occurrence of burglary and robbery reached their lowest points in 2008, with figures just above 1000 and 500 respectively.
The line graphs illustrate the variation of three types of crimes in Newport city
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centre
over a 10-year period.
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, almost every crime rate fluctuated over the
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period of time except
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burglary
which
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showed
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overall
downward trend.

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, in 2003, there were more cases of
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burglary
(approximately 3400) than
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car
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theft
(roughly 2800) and robbery (
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just
above 500). Over the time frame, there were always more incidents of
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car
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theft
than robbery whereas the
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number
of incidents of
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burglary
was higher than that of
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car
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theft
from 2003 to 2006 and there was equal in the
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number
of cases of
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burglary
and
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car
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theft
in the middle of the year 2006. From 2007 onwards, there were more cases of
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car
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theft
than
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burglary
, which
is followed
by robbery.

There was a sharp dip in the
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number
of incidents of
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car
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theft
in 2006 (around 2100)
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before
it continued to rise until the year of 2012. The
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number
of occurrence of
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burglary
and robbery reached their lowest points in 2008, with figures
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just
above 1000 and 500
respectively
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. v. 1

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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