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The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v.1

The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 1
A glance at the table provided reveals the distances travelled by passengers on five kinds of vehicles in a European country over a twenty years period, from 1995 to 2015. It is evident that there were fluctuations in the distances travelled in different modes of transports over the given period but trains and buses were more popular. One particularly interesting fact is that from a mere 2 billion kilometres travel in the airway in 1995, it soared to ten times in 2015. This shows that air travel has become popular in recent years. The rail travel, meanwhile, rose gradually by 10 billion in 2005 and reached the 60 billion mark in 2015. From the given figure it is clear that travelling in railways was the most popular form of travelling in the given European country. On the contrary, travelling on a bus was more popular in the 1990s, as 56 billion km were travelled using buses, but lost its popularity in the later years. Furthermore, distances travelled by bicycles and motorbikes were comparatively lesser and experienced a slow decline, to somewhere in the vicinity of 1 and 2 billion km. respectively in 2005, followed by a slight increase in 2015. It is also interesting to note that the total distance travelled by the passengers in this country in 1995 was 103 billion km while it increased over the years and reached 130 billion km in 2015.
A glance at the table provided reveals the
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distances
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travelled
by passengers on five kinds of vehicles in a European country over a twenty years period, from 1995 to 2015. It is evident that there were fluctuations in the
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distances
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travelled
in
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different
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period
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trains and buses were more popular.

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fact is that from a mere 2
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billion
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kilometres
travel in the airway in 1995, it soared to ten times in 2015. This
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shows
that air travel has become popular in recent years. The rail travel, meanwhile, rose
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by 10
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billion
in 2005 and reached the 60
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billion
mark in 2015. From the
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figure it is
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clear
that travelling in railways was the most popular form of travelling in the
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given
European country.
On the contrary
, travelling on a bus was more popular in the 1990s, as 56
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billion
km were
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travelled
using buses,
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but
lost its popularity in the later years.

Furthermore
,
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distances
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travelled
by bicycles and motorbikes were
comparatively
lesser and experienced a slow decline, to somewhere in the vicinity of 1 and 2
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billion
km.
respectively
in 2005, followed by a slight increase in 2015.

It is
also
interesting to note that the total
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distance
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travelled
by the passengers in this country in 1995 was 103
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billion
km while it increased over the years and reached 130
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billion
km in 2015.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 1

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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