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The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v.2

The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 2
The table data shows the distance travelled by people using different types of transportation in a European country in three different years. Distance travelled by people is categorized based on 5 types of transportations they used, and is shown in billion kilometres. Overall, the total distance people in this country travelled increased over time. Besides, buses and trains were their primary mode of transports while air travel gained popularity over time. As mentioned, buses, despite being the most used transportation type in 1995, became less popular after 20 years. 56 billion km travel by buses in 1995 fell by approximately one-tenth after 10 years. And in 2015, it reduced to 42 billion. However, trains became the most used transportation type in 2015 with 60 billion km travel log which was 18 billion km higher than the bus travel of this year. Regarding motorbike travels, the distances travelled in 1995 was 5 billion km which declined by 2 billion km after a decade and was 6 billion km in 2015. However, bicycle driving remained almost the same, 2 billion km both in 1995 and 2015 despite a fall in 2005. The most noticeable increase can be seen in air and rail travel, with the former became ten times to reach 20 billion and the latter rose by approximately a half to become 60 billion kilometres in 2015. This made way for an overall surge by the end of the period.
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in this country
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, with the former became ten times to reach 20
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in a European country in 1995, 2005 and 2015. v. 2

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