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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. v.2

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. v. 2
The maps compare the structural developments and the transformation of a village called Stockford between 1930 and 2010. A glance at the maps reveals that the Stockford village in 1930 had fewer houses and extended farmland but witnessed rapid housing development afterwards. As is observed, Stockford village is located at the east of the River Stoke. Parallel to this river, the main road has connected a bridge in the farthest north-east side of the village in both maps. A few houses on both sides of the road, two shops and a post office on the west side of the road were present in this village in 1930. Besides, an elementary school, a large garden and a connecting road to the bridge were on the east of this village. Two large farmlands were quite visible in the early map which disappeared in the latter one. The 2010's map reveals that the post office, the bridge and the primary school remained unaltered, though, the school building was enlarged. The shops disappeared and the garden with many of its trees was compromised to build more accommodation facilities. The large house was converted to a retirement home with some extension to its structure. On top of that, the number of houses increased remarkably and these houses were built on the previously existing farmlands and garden.
The
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compare the structural developments and the transformation of a
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village
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Stockford
between 1930 and 2010.

A glance at the
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reveals that the
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Stockford
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village
in 1930 had fewer
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houses
and extended farmland
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but
witnessed rapid housing development afterwards.

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is observed
,
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Stockford
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village
is located
at the east of the River Stoke. Parallel to this river, the main
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road
has connected a bridge in the farthest north-east side of the
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village
in both
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. A few
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houses
on both sides of the
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road
, two shops and a post office on the west side of the
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road
were present in this
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village
in 1930.
Besides
, an elementary school, a large garden and a connecting
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road
to the bridge were on the east of this
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village
. Two large farmlands were quite visible in the early
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which disappeared in the latter one.

The
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2010's
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reveals that the post office, the bridge and the primary school remained unaltered, though, the school building
was enlarged
. The shops disappeared and the garden with
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many
of its trees
was compromised
to build more accommodation facilities.
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The
large
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house
was converted
to a retirement home with
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some
extension to its structure.
On top of that
, the number of
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houses
increased
remarkably
and these
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houses
were built
on the previously existing farmlands and garden.
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IELTS academic The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. v. 2

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221 words
6.0
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