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The table below shows the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public placefor hiring over the period of three years. v.1

The table below shows the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public placefor hiring over the period of three years. v. 1
The table compares data about annual income and expenditure of Harckley Hall during 3 years period. Overall, while income from hiring room and tax declined, that from coffee saw a sharp rise over the period. Meanwhile, subsidies and profit tent to reduce. In the first year, tax income was considerably higher as opposed to other sources, where 75. 000 Euros were generated, while only 3000 Euros was brought from coffee. After a year, money from hiring room, coffee, and tax appeared to increase by 1000 Euros in the first two items and 3000 Euros with the last one. In contrast, funding from local council remained unchanged, while that from other bodies decreased by 2000 Euros. In the final year, all income sources saw a fall, whereas only the amount of money stemming from coffee continued rising to double of that in the first year surveyed. In terms of annual expenditure of this public place, it saw a rise in the second stage by 8000 Euros before dropping to 71000 Euro in the final year. Profit of harkley Hall, similarly, witnessed a steady decrease from 9000 Euros in the initial stage to only 1000 Euros after 3 years period.
The table compares data about annual
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and expenditure of
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Harckley
Hall during 3 years period.

Overall
, while
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income
from hiring room and tax declined, that from
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coffee
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saw
a sharp rise over the period. Meanwhile, subsidies and profit tent to
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reduce
.

In the
first
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year
, tax
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income
was
considerably
higher
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as
opposed to other sources, where 75. 000 Euros
were generated
, while
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only
3000 Euros
was brought
from
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coffee
. After a
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year
, money from hiring room,
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coffee
, and tax appeared to increase by 1000 Euros in the
first
two items and 3000 Euros with the last one.
In contrast
, funding from local council remained unchanged, while that from other bodies decreased by 2000 Euros. In the final
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year
, all
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income
sources
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saw
a fall, whereas
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only
the amount of money stemming from
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coffee
continued rising to double of that in the
first
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year
surveyed.

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In
terms of annual expenditure of this public place, it
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saw
a rise in the second stage by 8000 Euros
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before
dropping to 71000 Euro in the final
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year
. Profit of
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harkley
Hall,
similarly
, witnessed a steady decrease from 9000 Euros in the initial stage to
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only
1000 Euros after 3 years period.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the income and expenditure of Harckley Hall, a public placefor hiring over the period of three years. v. 1

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6.0
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