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The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009
The rendered tabular chart illustrates the data about employment rate and the average yearly salaries of fresh degree holders of Australian university in the year 2009. From the overall analysis, it is manifest that law, engineering and I. t, business graduates experienced a highest salary as compared to haealth and science graduates. At the fleeting glance it is immensely clear that, Very large majority of health graduates were employe and received annual income was $42, 000. In contrast, law and engineering fields employment received equal annual salary($59, 000). It is interesting that business graduates higher than art and social science graduates, however annual salary was greater in the case of business graduates accounting for 52, 000. As regards science graduates were employe and received $39, 000, which happened to be the least.
The rendered tabular chart illustrates the data about employment rate and the average yearly
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salaries
of fresh degree holders of Australian university in the year 2009.

From the
overall
analysis, it is manifest that law, engineering and I. t, business
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graduates
experienced
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a
highest
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salary
as compared to
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haealth
and science graduates.

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that,
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large majority of health
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graduates
were
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employe
and received annual income was $42, 000.
In contrast
, law and engineering fields employment received equal annual
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salary($59
, 000). It is interesting that business
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graduates
higher than art and social science
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graduates
,
however
annual
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salary
was greater in the case of business
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graduates
accounting for 52, 000. As regards science
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graduates
were
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employe
and received $39, 000, which happened to be the least.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009

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132 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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