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Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 103 - Quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 v.2

Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 103 - Quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 v. 2
The line graph shows the variation in the million tonnes of goods transportation by road, water, rail and pipeline in the UK during a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002. We can see that the most common trend was for the amount of goods transported to increase consistently with time. For example, the figure on road delivery from over 65 to around 100 million tonnes. Likewise, pipeline transportation figure was its smallest point of about 5 million tonnes in 1974, but 20 years later, it was enlarged to over 20 million tonnes after 1994 and remained stable until the year end. These are all substantial increase. The quantity of goods transported by water rose from 40 to over 60 million tonnes. The only period when there was a reduction in 1998 (from 60 to 50 million tonnes). However, an amount of goods transported by rail fluctuated across 1974 to 2002, between 30 and 40 million tonnes. Overall, this chart indicates that it was mainly road, pipeline and water which gave rise to the expansion of the quantities of goods transported over the United Kingdom, except rail transportation.
The line graph
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shows
the variation in the
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million
tonnes of
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goods
transportation by road, water, rail and pipeline in the UK during a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002.

We can
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see
that the most common trend was for the amount of
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goods
transported to increase
consistently
with time.
For example
, the figure on road delivery from
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over
65 to around 100
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million
tonnes.
Likewise
, pipeline transportation figure was its smallest point of about 5
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million
tonnes in 1974,
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but
20 years later, it
was enlarged
to
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over
20
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million
tonnes after 1994 and remained stable until the year
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end
. These are all substantial increase.

The quantity of
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goods
transported by water rose from 40 to
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over
60
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million
tonnes. The
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only
period when there was a reduction in 1998 (from 60 to 50
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million
tonnes).
However
, an amount of
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goods
transported by rail fluctuated across 1974 to 2002, between 30 and 40
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million
tonnes.

Overall
, this chart indicates that it was
mainly
road, pipeline and water which gave rise to the expansion of the quantities of
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goods
transported
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over
the United Kingdom, except rail transportation.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic Academic IELTS Writing task 1 Sample 103 - Quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
187 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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