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The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans
The diagram illustrates the aluminium drinks cans recycling processes. After the cans selling on vending machines, there are three main phases, starting from collecting empty cans, moving them to recycling factory, and re-producing aluminium at the recycling plant. Firstly, aluminium cans are separated from other materials such as steel cans at collection center where empty cans from the neighborhood are gathered. Then, empty cans in different boxes of each material are moved to the recycling center, At the center, aluminium cans are pressed by a machine to create a big block of cans. The blocks of aluminium cans are put into the recycling plant and is heated until they melt enough to create new aluminium bars. The bars are pressed and changes their form to a thin sheet of alumimnium roll. With this roll, new aluminium cans are produced. The cycle is completed when the new cans are slod in drinks machines. In this way, aluminium can be used over and over.
The diagram illustrates the
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aluminium
drinks
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cans
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recycling
processes. After the
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cans
selling on vending machines, there are three main phases, starting from collecting empty
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cans
, moving them to
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recycling
factory, and re-producing
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aluminium
at the
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recycling
plant.

Firstly
,
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aluminium
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cans
are separated
from other materials such as steel
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cans
at collection center where empty
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cans
from the neighborhood
are gathered
.

Then, empty
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cans
in
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different
boxes of each material are
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moved
to the
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recycling
center, At the center,
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aluminium
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cans
are pressed
by a machine to create a
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big
block of cans.

The blocks of
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aluminium
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cans
are put
into the
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recycling
plant and
is heated
until they melt
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enough
to create new
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aluminium
bars. The bars
are pressed
and
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changes
their form to a thin sheet of
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alumimnium
roll. With this roll, new
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aluminium
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cans
are produced
.

The cycle
is completed
when the new
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cans
are
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slod
in drinks machines. In this way,
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aluminium
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can
be
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used
over and over.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans

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162 words
5.5
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