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The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland
The diagram illustrates a headland, the area of hard rock which juts into the sea, erode slowly in stages. At the first time, a headland stood much further in the sea. Continuously, the waves attack the base of the cliff which has the weakest area. Then, the rock eroded into cracks and over the time it becomes larger and larger. These cracks which created by erosion develop into a cave. The process erosion continuous widens the cave and it undercuts through the headland until shaping an arch. There is an impressive example of natural arch just Durdle Door in Dorset. Next, the water continues to wipe the structure of an arch. Therefore, it makes the arch unstable and cannot support its roof. Further, it collapses into the sea when a mass of rock higher than the mainland so it becomes a stack. Moreover, the stack continually eroded until it finally leaves behind a stump. As a result, it creates the headland retreating but stack standing independently besides the headland. Overview, headland slowly disappear from the surface our planet, it is caused by erosion which waves against the cliff of coastal.
The diagram illustrates a headland, the area of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
rock which juts into the sea, erode
slowly
in stages.

At the
first
time, a headland stood much
further
in the sea.
Continuously
, the waves attack the base of the cliff which has the weakest area. Then, the rock eroded into cracks and over the time it becomes larger and larger.

These cracks which created by erosion develop into a cave. The process erosion continuous widens the cave and it undercuts through the headland until shaping an arch. There is an impressive example of natural arch
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
Possible spelling mistake found.
Durdle
Door in Dorset.

Next
, the water continues to wipe the structure of an arch.
Therefore
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the arch unstable and cannot support its roof.
Further
, it collapses into the sea when a mass of rock higher than the mainland
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it becomes a stack.

Moreover
, the stack
continually
eroded until it
finally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
behind a stump.
As a result
, it creates the headland retreating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
stack standing
independently
besides
the headland.

Overview, headland
slowly
disappear from the surface our planet, it
is caused
by erosion which waves against the cliff of coastal.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland

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