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The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v.4

The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 4
The bar chart gives information about how the imprisonment statistics changed in five different countries from 1930 to 1980. Overall, it is evident that the number of prisoners in Great Britain increased significantly during these period while these figures for other countries fluctuated. In 1930, Great Britain had the fewest number of prisoners, at 30. 000 whereas Canada had the higest figure of offenders, at 120. 000. These figures for New Zealand and United Nation were exactly the same, at 100. 000 which was higher than the figure of Australia (only 70. 000). In the following years, Great Britain witnessed a consistent increase in the number of prisoners and this figure reached a peak of more than 80. 000 in 1980. Whereas, the figures for other countries saw fluctuations. For example, the number of criminals in Australia decreased from 70. 000 to 40. 000 in 1950 an then rose up again in the next 30 years. In Canada, the number of prisoners reached a peak of 130. 000 in 1940 and then fluctuated while this figure for United Nation fluctuated during the observed time. At the end of the period, in 1980, United Nation was the nation having the highest number of criminals, at approximately 140. 000, followed by Canada, New Zealand and Great Britain, where had around 80. 000 offenders each. The number of prisoners in Australia was only 50. 000 which was the lowest among all countries.
The bar chart gives information about how the imprisonment statistics
changed
in five
different
countries
from 1930 to 1980.

Overall
, it is evident that the
number
of
prisoners
in
Great
Britain increased
significantly
during these period while these
figures
for other
countries
fluctuated.

In 1930,
Great
Britain had the fewest
number
of
prisoners
, at 30. 000 whereas Canada had the
higest
figure
of offenders, at 120. 000. These
figures
for New Zealand and United
Nation
were exactly the same, at 100. 000 which was higher than the
figure
of Australia (
only
70. 000). In the following years,
Great
Britain witnessed a consistent increase in the
number
of
prisoners
and this
figure
reached a peak of more than 80. 000 in 1980. Whereas, the
figures
for other
countries
saw
fluctuations.
For example
, the
number
of criminals in Australia decreased from 70. 000 to 40. 000 in 1950
an then
rose up again in the
next
30 years. In Canada, the
number
of
prisoners
reached a peak of 130. 000 in 1940 and then fluctuated while this
figure
for United
Nation
fluctuated during the observed time.

At the
end
of the period, in 1980, United
Nation
was the
nation
having the highest
number
of criminals, at approximately 140. 000, followed by Canada, New Zealand and
Great
Britain, where had around 80. 000 offenders each. The
number
of
prisoners
in Australia was
only
50. 000 which was the lowest among all
countries
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 4

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