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The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v.1

The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 1
The bar graph shows the number of detainees in five countries - Britain, Australia, New Zealand, US and Canada between 1930 and 1980. Overall, Canada had the highest number of prisoners in 1930 while Great Britain had the least, but after 50 years, the number of prisoners decreased in Canada and the United States had the highest prisoners. Initially, in 1930, Canada had 120 thousand prisoners and that was the highest number of inmates among the five countries. There were 100 thousand prisoners both in the US and New Zealand. Again, Australia had around 70 thousand prisoners and Great Britain had only 30 thousand prisoners and that was the lowest. After a decade, prisoners’ number in Britain remained almost the same while the number decreased in Australia, New Zealand and Canada. But this year the total number of prisoners increased in the US by 30 thousand and reached to 130 thousand. In 1950, the prisoners’ number increased in Britain and slightly decreased in Australia and New Zealand. On the other hand, the prisoner in Canada increased and got highest among the five countries and decreased in the US. A similar trend in terms of prisoner numbers in these countries could be observed after a decade. Finally, in 1980, the prisoners’ number in these countries increased except in Australia. The US had the highest number of prisoners in this year and Great Britain, Canada and New Zealand had more than 80 thousand prisoners in this year. In summary, over the 50 years period, the crime and imprisonment number got worse in US and Britain while Australia, Canada and New Zealand did some progress. In 1980, Australia had the least number of prisoners which indicate their improvement in law and order.
The bar graph
shows
the
number
of detainees in five
countries
-
Britain, Australia,
New
Zealand, US and Canada between 1930 and 1980.
Overall
, Canada had the highest
number
of
prisoners
in 1930 while Great Britain had the least,
but
after 50 years, the
number
of
prisoners
decreased
in Canada and the United States had the highest prisoners.

Initially
, in 1930, Canada had 120 thousand
prisoners
and that was the highest
number
of inmates among the five
countries
. There were 100 thousand
prisoners
both in the US and
New
Zealand. Again, Australia had around 70 thousand
prisoners
and Great Britain had
only
30 thousand
prisoners
and that was the lowest. After a decade,
prisoners’
number
in Britain remained almost the same while the
number
decreased
in Australia,
New
Zealand and Canada.
But
this
year
the total
number
of
prisoners
increased
in the US by 30 thousand and reached to 130 thousand. In 1950, the
prisoners’
number
increased
in Britain and
slightly
decreased
in Australia and
New
Zealand.
On the other hand
, the
prisoner
in Canada
increased
and
got
highest among the five
countries
and
decreased
in the US. A similar trend in terms of
prisoner
numbers
in these
countries
could
be observed
after a decade.
Finally
, in 1980, the
prisoners’
number
in these
countries
increased
except in Australia. The US had the highest
number
of
prisoners
in this
year
and Great Britain, Canada and
New
Zealand had more than 80 thousand
prisoners
in this year.

In summary, over the 50 years period, the crime and imprisonment
number
got
worse in US and Britain while Australia, Canada and
New
Zealand did
some
progress. In 1980, Australia had the least
number
of
prisoners
which indicate their improvement in law and order.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 1

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