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The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v.2

The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 2
The table chart compares the numbers of prisoners from 1930 to 1980 in five different countries, namely Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, the United States and Canada. At a glance at the graph reveals that imprisonment figure in the USA and UK climbed over the period and in Canada, Australia, New Zealand, it actually declined. It is clearly seen that the United States had the highest number of inmates. Also, Britain had the lowest figure in 4 out of 6 years. In 1930, the number of prisoners in the United  States was the highest, with 120 thousand prisoners, then this number increased significantly to reach a peak of 140 thousand in 1980. By contrast, Britain had the lowest figure of prisoners until 1970, then the figure jumped suddenly to reach 90 thousand. Canada had the highest number of imprisonment in 1930 and 1960 with nearly 140 thousand people in each year. In 1970 the number of prisoners in Great Britain, New Zealand and Australia was same, about 70 thousand people. In 1980, 50 thousands of people in New Zealand were put in prison which was the lowest figure in this year.
The table chart compares the
numbers
of
prisoners
from 1930 to 1980 in five
different
countries,
namely
Great Britain, Australia,
New
Zealand, the United States and Canada. At a glance at the graph reveals that imprisonment
figure
in the USA and UK climbed over the period and in Canada, Australia,
New
Zealand, it actually declined.

It is
clearly
seen
that the United States had the highest
number
of inmates.
Also
, Britain had the lowest
figure
in 4 out of 6 years. In 1930, the
number
of
prisoners
in the United
 
States was the highest, with 120 thousand
prisoners
, then this
number
increased
significantly
to reach a peak of 140 thousand in 1980. By contrast, Britain had the lowest
figure
of
prisoners
until 1970, then the
figure
jumped
suddenly
to reach 90 thousand.

Canada had the highest
number
of imprisonment in 1930 and 1960 with
nearly
140 thousand
people
in each year. In 1970 the
number
of
prisoners
in Great Britain,
New
Zealand and Australia was same, about 70 thousand
people
. In 1980,
50 thousands of
people
in
New
Zealand
were put
in prison which was the lowest
figure
in this year.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 2

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191 words
6.0
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