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The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions. v.3

The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions. v. 3
The table compares the number of audiences in millions who enjoyed four types of movies such as action, romance, comedy and horror in four different countries- India, Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan.   The table also shows the audience total for each of the four given countries. The overall trend can be seen that Indian people watch more movies in cinema than people in other three countries, while Japanese people are the least in terms of their number of watching movies in cinema halls. The other significant trend is that the action movies are the most favourable movie type among people in these four countries. The total numbers of viewers are around 30 million and in each country, it is around 7. 5 million. In Japan and India, horror movies are the least popular movie genre- the total number of audience are 2. 5 and 2. 2 million respectively, while comedy movies are the least enjoyed in New Zealand  with the total number of viewers around 3. 9 million. On the other hand, romance movies are less popular in Ireland but in India, they are the second favourable movies. From this evidence, we can conclude that horror movies are the least preferred movies then the comedy in the second least preferred type while action movies are the most popular and romance movies in the second most watched movies.
The table compares the
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of audiences in
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who enjoyed four types of
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movies
such as action, romance, comedy and horror in four
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countries-
India, Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan.
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The table
also
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the audience
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for each of the four
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countries.

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overall
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that Indian
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people
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more
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movies
in cinema than
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in other three
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countries
, while Japanese
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people
are the least in terms of their
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of watching
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in cinema halls.
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other significant trend is that the action
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are the most
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favourable
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movie
type among
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in these four
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The
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of viewers are around 30
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and in each
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, it is around 7. 5
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. In Japan and India, horror
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are the least popular
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genre- the
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of audience are 2. 5 and 2. 2
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respectively
, while comedy
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are the least enjoyed in New Zealand
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with the
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of viewers around 3. 9 million.

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, romance
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are less popular in Ireland
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in India, they are the second
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favourable
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movies
. From this evidence, we can conclude that horror
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are the least preferred
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then the comedy in the second least preferred type while action
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are the most popular and romance
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in the second most
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7Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions. v. 3

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