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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v.3

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 3
The tables compare sales of two categories of products, namely: fair-trade-labelled coffee and Fairtrade-labelled bananas in five European countries in two different terms, 1999 and 2004. These coffees and bananas were produced by farmers of developing nations and a fair price is given to those farmers according to the agreement and that’s why the name Fairtrade is attached. Overall, it is clear that majority of the countries experienced an increased sales of those products and the biggest rise in sales were in the UK and Switzerland respectively. In 1999, the largest coffee sale, 3 million Euros, was in Switzerland but after five years, the highest sale could be observed in the UK (20 million Euros) that recorded more than three times higher than that of Switzerland (6 million Euros). The sales amounts in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden were 1. 8, 1 and 0. 8 million Euros respectively in 1999 and these amounts increased in five years. Meanwhile, Switzerland was the largest market for the Fairtrade-labelled banana sales with 15 million Euros sold in 1999 which was higher than the combined sales in other four countries. The sales amount of bananas reached to 47 million Euros in 2004 which was more than three times higher than that of 1999 and the second largest market for this product was in the UK where 1 million Euros was sold in 1999 and that increased by 5. 5 times in 2004. Interestingly the sales volume of the fairtrade bananas decreased in Sweden and Denmark in 2004 than that of 1999. The lowest amount of sales for Fairtrade-labelled coffee could be seen in Sweden and it was Denmark and Sweden where the lowest amount of Fairtrade-labelled bananas were sold in both years.
The tables compare
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sales
of two categories of products,
namely
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fair
-trade-labelled
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coffee
and
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Fairtrade-labelled
bananas in five European countries in two
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different
terms, 1999 and 2004. These
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coffees
and bananas
were produced
by farmers of developing nations and a
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fair
price is
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given
to those farmers according to the agreement and that’s why the name
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Fairtrade
is attached
.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that majority of the countries experienced an increased
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sales
of those products and the biggest rise in
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sales
were in the UK and Switzerland
respectively
. In 1999, the largest
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coffee
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sale
, 3
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million
Euros, was in Switzerland
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but
after five years, the highest
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sale
could
be observed
in the UK (20
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million
Euros) that recorded more than three times higher than that of Switzerland (6
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million
Euros). The
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sales
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amounts
in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden were 1. 8, 1 and 0. 8
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million
Euros
respectively
in 1999 and these
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increased in five years.

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Fairtrade-labelled
banana
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sales
with 15
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million
Euros sold in 1999 which was higher than the combined
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sales
in other four countries. The
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sales
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amount
of bananas reached to 47
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million
Euros in 2004 which was more than three times higher than that of 1999 and the second largest market for this product was in the UK where 1
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million
Euros
was sold
in 1999 and that increased by 5. 5 times in 2004.
Interestingly
the
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sales
volume of the
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fairtrade
bananas decreased in Sweden and Denmark in 2004 than that of 1999.

The lowest
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of
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sales
for
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Fairtrade-labelled
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coffee
could be
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seen
in Sweden and it was Denmark and Sweden where the lowest
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of
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Fairtrade-labelled
bananas
were sold
in both years.
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IELTS academic The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 3

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