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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v.2

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 2
The given tables provide sales information on coffee and bananas which had Fairtrade labels attached to them and had been sold in five different countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004. The sales price are given in millions of Euros and the fairtrade coffee and bananas indicate that the farmers who produced these products are from developing countries and have been paid a decent price for their production. As a general trend, the UK was the largest market for Fairtrade labelled coffee while Swiss people preferred bananas of this category in 2004. As the table data demonstrates, the market for Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas witnessed a dramatic increase in 2004 than that of 5 years ago. With regards to coffee sales, the highest amount of sales could be observed in Switzerland in 1999 with exactly 3 million Euro sale volume. The sale in the UK in this year was half of that and the lowest sale was recorded in Sweden with less than 1 million Euro. After 5 years, the sales of coffee in these countries increases with a remarkable improvement in the UK. The sales went up to 20 million Euros in the UK in 2004 with was almost double than the combined sales amount in the remaining four countries. For the banana sales, Switzerland was the largest market in both years. Sales amount in the rest of the countries summed to just over 4 million while it was 15 million alone in Switzerland. The sales upsurged significantly and went up to 47 million while it decreased in Denmark.
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tables provide
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sales
information on
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coffee
and bananas which had
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Fairtrade
labels attached to them and had
been sold
in five
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different
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countries
in Europe in 1999 and 2004. The
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sales
price are
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in
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millions
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fairtrade
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coffee
and bananas indicate that the farmers who produced these products are from developing
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countries
and have
been paid
a decent price for their production.

As a general trend, the UK was the largest market for
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Fairtrade
labelled
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coffee
while Swiss
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people
preferred bananas of this category in 2004.

As the table data demonstrates, the market for
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Fairtrade
labelled
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coffee
and bananas witnessed a dramatic increase in 2004 than that of 5 years ago.
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coffee
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sales
, the highest amount of
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could
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in Switzerland in 1999 with exactly 3
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million
Euro
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sale
volume. The
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sale
in the UK in this
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was half of that and the lowest
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sale
was recorded
in Sweden with less than 1
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million
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. After 5 years, the
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of
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coffee
in these
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countries
increases with a remarkable improvement in the UK. The
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sales
went up to 20
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million
Euros in the UK in 2004 with was almost
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double
than the combined
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sales
amount in the remaining four countries.

For the banana
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, Switzerland was the largest market in both years.
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amount in the rest of the
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summed to
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over 4
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million
while it was 15
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million
alone in Switzerland. The
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sales
upsurged
significantly
and went up to 47
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million
while it decreased in Denmark.
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IELTS academic The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. v. 2

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6.0
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