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the table below shows the cinema viewing figures for different types of films by country, in millions v.2

the table below shows the cinema viewing figures for different types of films by country, in millions v. 2
The graph illustrates the average number of movie-fans from different countries prefer to watch films at the cinema. In general, it is plainly visible that Indians are the best cinema audience. Another interesting point is that while the action is the most watched movie genre, the horror is the least one. A closer look to the details reveals that Indian people prefer to watch more films at the cinema than other nationalities, nearly under a quarter millions. As regards the most popular genre, the action has the highest ratio of watching, about one-third million. However, the horror has the lowest one, respectively above the tenth million. With respect to the lowest figures, Japanese people were the least attendees of cinemas, nearly 2 million. Subsequent nationalities share roughly the same ratio in attending the cinema. Regards the genres viewing figures are fluctuating between 4 and 5 million. The obvious difference is in watching the horror movies. As Irish people have the most of their share of enjoying this genre than the others, standing at 6. 4 million.
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.
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visible that Indians are the best
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cinema
audience. Another interesting point is that while the action is the most
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watched
movie
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, the horror is the least one.

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details
reveals that Indian
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people
prefer to
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watch
more films at the
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cinema
than other nationalities,
nearly
under a quarter
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millions
. As regards the most popular
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genre
, the action has the highest ratio of watching, about one-third
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million
.
However
, the horror has the lowest one,
respectively
above the tenth million.

With respect to the lowest figures, Japanese
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were the least attendees of
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cinemas
,
nearly
2
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. Subsequent nationalities share roughly the same ratio in attending the
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cinema
. Regards the genres viewing figures are fluctuating between 4 and 5
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million
. The obvious difference is in watching the horror movies. As Irish
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people
have the most of their share of enjoying this
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than the others, standing at 6. 4
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.
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IELTS academic the table below shows the cinema viewing figures for different types of films by country, in millions v. 2

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