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The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. v.2

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. v. 2
The given illustrations show information on the world population from 1800 to 2100 (with projection) and show the distribution of this population in developed and developing regions. According to the first graph, from 1800 to 1920, the global population was less than 2000 million with a slight increase. But after 1940, this population boomed and reached to 6000 million in the year 2000. The graph shows the projection that this rapid growth o population would continue till 2050 when the population would reach to over 8000 million. But after that, the global population will decrease and will fall to around 6000 million in the year 2100 according to the projection. According to the second graph, around 1200 million people lived in the developed regions in 2015 and the population in this part would remain almost the same till 2040. On the contrary, the population of the developing country will keep increasing and would reach to 4000 million in 2040 compared to the initial population of 2100 million in 2015. In summary, the global population will keep on increasing till 2050 and this increase would be more on developing regions than the developed regions. After 2050, it is projected that the total population of the world will be decreasing.
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illustrations
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show
information on the world
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population
from 1800 to 2100 (with projection) and
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show
the distribution of this
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population
in developed and developing regions.

According to the
first
graph, from 1800 to 1920, the global
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population
was less than 2000
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million
with a slight increase.
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But
after 1940, this
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population
boomed and reached to 6000
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million
in the year 2000. The graph
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shows
the projection that this rapid growth o
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population
would continue till 2050 when the
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population
would reach to over 8000
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million
.
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But
after that, the global
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population
will decrease and will fall to around 6000
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million
in the year 2100 according to the projection.

According to the second graph, around 1200
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million
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people
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lived
in the developed regions in 2015 and the
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population
in this part would remain almost the same till 2040.
On the contrary
, the
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population
of the
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developing country
will
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keep
increasing and would reach to 4000
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million
in 2040 compared to the initial
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population
of 2100
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million
in 2015.

In summary, the global
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population
will
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keep
on increasing till 2050 and this increase would be more on developing regions than the developed regions. After 2050, it
is projected
that the total
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population
of the world will be decreasing.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. v. 2

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