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The given table illustrates how consumers in 5 different countries spent their money on different items in 2002. Overall the figures in the table varied through the period. v.2

The given table illustrates how consumers in 5 different countries spent their money on different items in 2002. Overall the figures in the table varied through the period. v. 2
The given table illustrates how consumers in 5 different countries spent their money on different items in 2002. Overall the figures in the table varied through the period. Food, drinks and tobacco spending accounted for the highest percentage in all 5 countries. The consumer spending in Turkey and Ireland are the highest, as they accounted for 32. 14% and 28. 19% respectively, while the figures in the other 3 countries are under 20%. Clothing and footwear were in second important position in 5 countries. The percentage of expenditure were about 5% to 6. 5%, except for Italy with 9%. The amount of money spent on leisure/education was less than on it on 2 categories above. In Turkey, it accounted for 4. 35% meanwhile the figures in the others 4 countries were all under 4%. It is clear to point out that people in those countries spent on food, drinks and tobacco much more than the other 2 items mentioned in the chart.
The
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table illustrates how consumers in 5
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different
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countries
spent their money on
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items in 2002.
Overall
the figures in the table varied through the period.

Food, drinks and tobacco spending accounted for the highest percentage in all 5
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countries
. The consumer spending in Turkey and Ireland are the highest, as they accounted for 32. 14% and 28. 19%
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, while the figures in the other 3
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countries
are under 20%.

Clothing and footwear were in second
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important
position in 5
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countries
. The percentage of expenditure were about 5% to 6. 5%,
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except for
Italy with 9%.

The amount of money spent on leisure/education was less than on it on 2 categories above. In Turkey, it accounted for 4. 35% meanwhile the figures in the others 4
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countries
were all under 4%.

It is
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clear
to point out that
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people
in those
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countries
spent on food, drinks and tobacco much more than the other 2 items mentioned in the chart.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The given table illustrates how consumers in 5 different countries spent their money on different items in 2002. Overall the figures in the table varied through the period. v. 2

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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