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The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v.2

The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2
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, there was a dramatic difference between the proportion of
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cars
and food while the rest of the parts
slightly
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changed
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comprised more than half the budget of
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people
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cars
accounted for over one-fifth in spending in 1971 and a double increase to 43 % in 2001. Much of the increase in
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cars
can be
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explained
by the decrease in the food section, it fell by 30% in 2001, which is two-third of the figures in 1971
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also
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changed
moderately
. The percentage of petrol and furniture
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showed
a similar pattern of a slight reduction, dropped by 2% and 1%
respectively
. In terms of the restaurant, the
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people
in the
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spent money
doubly
, up from 7% in 1971 to 14% in 2001. The proportion gap was
particularly
large
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in the computer
, which was six times in 2001 compared to the figure in 1971.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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