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The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v.2

The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2
14. 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%" > The pie charts indicate the alteration of the uk in spending money on different habits for 30 years from 1971 to 2001. 14. 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%" & gt; In general, there was a dramatic difference between the proportion of cars and food while the rest of the parts slightly changed. 14. 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%" & gt; In detail, food and cars still comprised more than half the budget of uk people. cars accounted for over one-fifth in spending in 1971 and a double increase to 43 % in 2001. Much of the increase in th cars can be explained by the decrease in the food section, it fell by 30% in 2001, which is two-third of the figures in 1971 ( 14% ). 14. 0pt; mso-bidi-font-size: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%" & gt; On the other hand, other areas also changed moderately. The percentage of petrol and furniture showed a similar pattern of a slight reduction, dropped by 2% and 1% respectively. In terms of the restaurant, the people in the uk spent money doubly, up from 7% in 1971 to 14% in 2001. The proportion gap was particularly large in the computer, which was six times in 2001 compared to the figure in 1971.
14. 0pt;
mso-bidi-font-size
: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%"
&gt
; The pie charts indicate the alteration of the
uk
in spending money on
different
habits for 30 years from 1971 to 2001.

14.
0pt
;
mso-bidi-font-size
: 11.
0pt
; line-height: 107%"
&amp
; gt;
In general
, there was a dramatic difference between the proportion of
cars
and food while the rest of the parts
slightly
changed
.

14.
0pt
;
mso-bidi-font-size
: 11.
0pt
; line-height: 107%"
&amp
; gt; In detail, food and
cars
still
comprised more than half the budget of
uk
people
.
cars
accounted for over one-fifth in spending in 1971 and a double increase to 43 % in 2001. Much of the increase in
th
cars
can be
explained
by the decrease in the food section, it fell by 30% in 2001, which is two-third of the figures in 1971
(
14%
)
.

14. 0pt;
mso-bidi-font-size
: 11. 0pt; line-height: 107%"
&amp
; gt;
On the other hand
, other areas
also
changed
moderately
. The percentage of petrol and furniture
showed
a similar pattern of a slight reduction, dropped by 2% and 1%
respectively
. In terms of the restaurant, the
people
in the
uk
spent money
doubly
, up from 7% in 1971 to 14% in 2001. The proportion gap was
particularly
large
in the computer
, which was six times in 2001 compared to the figure in 1971.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the changes in the spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
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