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The table below shows the amount fish caught, in thousands tonnes, in 2008 and 2015 by eight European countries. v.2

The table below shows the amount fish caught, in thousands tonnes, in 2008 and 2015 by eight European countries. v. 2
The chart illustrates how much fish being captured by eight countries in Europe in two separate years, 2008 and 2015. Units are measured in thousands of tonnes. Amongst the countries given, six of which including the total amount of fish being captured increased, In Spain, Italy and Lativa figures declined. However, Spain remains steady with the highest amount in both years. Although the total amount of fish caught went up from 3000 tonnes with around14 thousand tonnes rose in 2015, in Italy, Spain and Lativa went down to approximately 50 and 66 thousand tonnes respectively. Whereas, Spain accounted for 194 thousand tonnes drop and yet marked as the biggest amount over the 7 years. Of all the countries that climbed its figures, Denmark stayed the same as the second-highest over the period with 200 thousand tonnes increased. Similarly, in Germany and Ireland gained only around 22 to 23 thousand tonnes respectively, while Belgium from 22 to 24 thousand tonnes in the end year. The lowest amount recorded was in Cyprus which began from a thousand tonnes to just 2 thousand tonnes in 2015.
The chart illustrates how much fish
being captured
by eight countries in Europe in two separate years, 2008 and 2015. Units
are measured
in thousands of tonnes.

Amongst the countries
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given
, six of which including the total
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amount
of fish
being captured
increased, In Spain, Italy and
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Lativa
figures declined.
However
, Spain remains steady with the highest
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amount
in both years.

Although the total
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amount
of fish caught went up from 3000 tonnes with around14 thousand tonnes rose in 2015, in Italy, Spain and
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Lativa
went down to approximately 50 and 66 thousand tonnes
respectively
. Whereas, Spain accounted for 194 thousand tonnes drop and
yet
marked as the biggest
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amount
over the 7 years.

Of all the countries that climbed its figures, Denmark stayed the same as the second-highest over the period with 200 thousand tonnes increased.
Similarly
, in Germany and Ireland gained
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only
around 22 to 23 thousand tonnes
respectively
, while Belgium from 22 to 24 thousand tonnes in the
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end
year. The lowest
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amount
recorded was in Cyprus which began from a thousand tonnes to
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just
2 thousand tonnes in 2015.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The table below shows the amount fish caught, in thousands tonnes, in 2008 and 2015 by eight European countries. v. 2

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