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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the v.4

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart provides information about profits of one country from international trading in different areas and percentage alterations in values over a 2-year period. Overall, a tendency of growth in export earnings exists in this country. According to table, all categories of export increased, except gems and jewellery which showed significantly a decline in 5. 18%. Others grew ranging from at least 1% to 15% in 2016. The category of textiles rose to 15%. It was the most remarkable alteration in 2016. Likewise, It is worth to mentioned that total growth was almost 21%. As for the chart, 3 categories such as petroleum products, engineering goods and gems and jewellery are the most crucial parts of the export profits of this country since they amount more or less 80% of total income. In 2015, the category of textiles was an outsider taking the last place. However, in 2016, this category equalized with agricultural products at point of $30 billions.
The bar chart provides information about profits of one country from international trading in
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areas and percentage alterations in values over a 2-year period.
Overall
, a tendency of growth in export earnings exists in this country.

According to table, all
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categories
of export increased, except gems and
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jewellery
which
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showed
significantly
a decline in 5. 18%. Others grew ranging from at least 1% to 15% in 2016. The
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category
of textiles rose to 15%. It was the most remarkable alteration in 2016.
Likewise
, It is worth to mentioned that total growth was almost 21%.

As for the chart, 3
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categories
such as petroleum products, engineering
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goods
and gems and
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jewellery
are the most crucial parts of the export profits of this country since they amount more or less 80% of total income. In 2015, the
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category
of textiles was an outsider taking the last place.
However
, in 2016, this
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category
equalized with agricultural products at point of $30 billions.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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