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The graphs below show the primary social networking of British users in 2010 and projected figures for 2018. v.2

The graphs below show the primary social networking of British users in 2010 and projected figures for 2018. v. 2
The pie charts illustrate the main social network by Britain users in 2010 with predicted values for 2018. Overall, the number of Facebook users has increased and this trend is expected to continue until the end year, while the other categories declined significantly. However, Bebo disappears at the end year. In the United Kingdom, facebook by far has been widely used and began with almost half of the total and continue to move up its percentage to nearly three quarters in 2018. Twitter stayed the same as the second-highest from 2010 until the end year from 18. 33% to 17. 39 % respectively. Meanwhile, Pinterest and Google Plus users started the year to around 16. 95% and 10. 45% respectively. However, these figures are envisaged to decline modestly of about 9% difference in 2018 as compared to Bebo users which gained a data from the beginning of 8. 17% and it is anticipated to disappear in the end year, 2018.
The pie charts illustrate the main social network by Britain
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users
in 2010 with predicted values for 2018.

Overall
, the number of Facebook
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users
has increased and this trend is
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expected
to continue until the
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end
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year
, while the other categories declined
significantly
.
However
,
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Bebo
disappears at the
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end
year.

In the United Kingdom,
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facebook
by far has been
widely
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used
and began with almost half of the total and continue to
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move
up its percentage to
nearly
three quarters in 2018. Twitter stayed the same as the second-highest from 2010 until the
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end
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year
from 18. 33% to 17. 39 %
respectively
.

Meanwhile, Pinterest and Google Plus
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users
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started
the
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year
to around 16. 95% and 10. 45%
respectively
.
However
, these figures
are envisaged
to decline
modestly
of about 9% difference in 2018 as compared to
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Bebo
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users
which gained a data from the beginning of 8. 17% and it
is anticipated
to disappear in the
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end
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year
, 2018.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the primary social networking of British users in 2010 and projected figures for 2018. v. 2

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160 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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