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The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.2

The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2
The Pie chart illustrates the demand for fast-food, like, Hamburger, Fish and Chips, and Pizza over a period of 20 years between 1970 to 1990 in Britain. As it is presented in the Pie chart, in 1970 Pizza has the maximum demand of nearly 300 gm followed by fish and chips and hamburger which were below 100 gm. Thereafter, there was a steady rise in demand for Fish and chips and Hamburger between 1970 to 1980. However, the trend was opposite for Pizza, which has a steady downfall till 1985, and reached to 200 gm from 300 gm in 1970. After 1980, the trend for Fish and chips and Hamburgers indicated the rapid change, wherein next 10 year Fish and chip reached to a need of 500 gm from 150 gm in 1980. And in the case of Hamburger it reached to nearly 280 gm in 1990. While, the Pizza saw a slight change in 1970 and reached to roughly 220 gm in 1970 from 200 gm in 1985. Overall, Fish and chips and Hamburger demand increased over the period of 20 years. Where Fish and chips has the highest demand in 1970. On the other hand, Pizza followed a downfall in 20 years.
The Pie chart illustrates the
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-food, like, Hamburger, Fish and Chips, and Pizza over a period of 20 years
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between 1970 to 1990
in Britain.

As it
is presented
in the Pie chart, in 1970 Pizza has the maximum
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demand
of
nearly
300 gm followed by fish and chips and hamburger which were below 100 gm. Thereafter, there was a steady rise in
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demand
for Fish and chips and Hamburger
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1970 and 1980".
between 1970 to 1980
.
However
, the trend was opposite for Pizza, which has a steady downfall till 1985, and
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reached
to 200 gm from 300 gm in 1970.

After 1980, the trend for Fish and chips and Hamburgers indicated the rapid
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change
, wherein
next
10
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year
Fish and
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chip
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reached
to a need of 500 gm from 150 gm in 1980. And in the case of Hamburger it
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reached
to
nearly
280 gm in 1990. While, the Pizza
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saw
a slight
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change
in 1970 and
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reached
to roughly 220 gm in 1970 from 200 gm in 1985.

Overall
, Fish and chips and Hamburger
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demand
increased over the period of 20 years. Where Fish and chips has the highest
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demand
in 1970.
On the other hand
, Pizza followed a downfall in 20 years.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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