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You should spend about 20 minutes on this Task. The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in2013, and also the amount (in tonnes) of fertiliser used. The second graph shows the volume ofrainfall in eac v.48

The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in2013, and also the amount (in tonnes) of fertiliser used. The second graph shows the volume ofrainfall in eac v. 48
The charts give information regarding the tonnage of fruit produced in a farm per month in 2013, the fertiliser used and the monthly rainfall in that year. We can see that fruit production rose steadily from just over 2 tonnes in January to a peak of roughly 4. 2 tonnes by August. Output then fell rapidly, declining to around the initial 2 tonne mark in December. However, looking at fertiliser use, we see that this seasonal pattern is largely reversed: the most fertiliser (just under 1 tonne) was utilised in April, followed by a marked decline to zero in June and July. Fertiliser consumption then increased slightly in the autumn, rising to a total of around 0. 7 tonnes before dipping to just below 0. 5 tonnes at year end. Regarding rainfall, this appears to reflect the use of fertiliser, with an early high of 16mm in February, falling consistently to 4mm in July, August and September. Rainfall then increased steadily to reach 14mm in December. In summary, this farm generally employed the most fertiliser at seasons of high rainfall, and by contrast it produced the most fruit when both rainfall and fertiliser use were around their lowest.
The charts give information regarding the tonnage of fruit produced in a farm per month in

2013, the
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fertiliser
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used
and the monthly
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rainfall
in that year.

We can
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see
that fruit production rose
steadily
from
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just
over 2 tonnes in January to a peak of

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roughly
4. 2 tonnes by August. Output then fell
rapidly
, declining to around the initial 2 tonne mark
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in


December.
However
, looking at
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fertiliser
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use
, we
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see
that this seasonal pattern is
largely
reversed:

the most
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fertiliser
(
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just
under 1 tonne) was
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utilised
in April, followed by a marked decline to zero in

June and July.
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Fertiliser
consumption then increased
slightly
in the autumn, rising to a total of
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around


0. 7 tonnes
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before
dipping to
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just
below 0. 5 tonnes at year
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end
.

Regarding
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rainfall
, this appears to reflect the
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use
of
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fertiliser
, with an early high of
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16mm
in

February, falling
consistently
to
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4mm
in July, August and September.
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Rainfall
then increased
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steadily


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to
reach
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14mm
in December.

In summary, this farm
generally
employed the most
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fertiliser
at seasons of high
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rainfall
, and by

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contrast
it produced the most fruit when both
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rainfall
and
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fertiliser
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use
were around their lowest.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes
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IELTS academic The first graph below shows the weight (in tonnes) of fruit produced by a farm during each month in2013, and also the amount (in tonnes) of fertiliser used. The second graph shows the volume ofrainfall in eac v. 48

Academic
  American English
13 paragraphs
198 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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