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The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. v.2

The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. v. 2
The pie chart compares revenue earned from six economic sectors by Morocco in 2003 and the column graph gives data on annual income from fishing industry between 1982 and 2003. Overall, tourism, manufacturing and foreign remittance were three main sources of income for Morocco in 2003 and the highest revenue from fishing came in the year 2000. Getting back to the details, the highest revenue earning sector for Morocco was tourism that brought just over a quarter of total revenue in 2003. Manufacturing and foreign remittance comprised the second and third most important economic sectors for this country and brought 45% of the revenue. The lowest revenue came from agriculture which was only 2%. Fishing earned 13% of the total revenue which was just 1% less than the revenue earned from the petroleum sector. Based on the column graph, Morocco earned less than half a billion US dollar from fishing in 1982 and next year, this revenue surged to nearly 2 billion. The revenue continued to increase and in 1997 and almost touched 3 billion. The highest fish related income in Morocco came in the year 2000 and the revenue in this year from fishing was well over 4 billion USD. Afterwards, revenue dropped and in next two years remained stable at approximately 3. 8 billion. In 2003, income from fishing significantly dropped and reached below 2 billion dollar.
The pie chart compares
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revenue
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earned
from six economic sectors by Morocco in 2003 and the column graph gives data on annual
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income
from
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fishing
industry between 1982 and 2003.
Overall
, tourism, manufacturing and foreign remittance were three main sources of
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income
for Morocco in 2003 and the highest
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from
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fishing
came in the
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year
2000.

Getting back to the
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, the highest
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earning sector for Morocco was tourism that brought
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over a quarter of total
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revenue
in 2003. Manufacturing and foreign remittance comprised the second and third most
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important
economic sectors for this country and brought 45% of the
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. The lowest
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came from agriculture which was
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only
2%.
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Fishing
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earned
13% of the total
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which was
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just
1% less than the
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earned
from the petroleum sector.

Based on the column graph, Morocco
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less than half a
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US dollar from
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fishing
in 1982 and
next
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, this
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surged to
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2
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. The
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continued to increase and in 1997 and almost touched 3
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billion
. The highest fish related
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income
in Morocco came in the
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2000 and the
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in this
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year
from
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was well over 4
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billion
USD. Afterwards,
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dropped and in
next
two years remained stable at approximately 3. 8
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billion
. In 2003,
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income
from
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fishing
significantly
dropped and reached below 2
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billion
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dollar
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
229 words
6.5
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