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The bar chars show the number of cars per thousand people in 5 different countries in Europe in 2005, 2009 and 2010 in comparison with the average number. v.2

The bar chars show the number of cars per thousand people in 5 different countries in Europe in 2005, 2009 and 2010 in comparison with the average number. v. 2
The bar charts give information about the car ownership in 5 different countries in Europe as well as compare them with the figure of European average. Overall, the number of cars owned in five countries fluctuated slightly. The highest number of cars in the three years surveyed was possessed by Germany as compared with other four countries and even the average number of entire European countries, which was around 700 cars per thousand people. While there was no changes in the number of cars per thousand people in France all the way with the number of 700 cars, that of France still hold the second position in comparison with other four countries. Meanwhile, there was a steady decreasing in the car ownership from almost 700 cars per thousand people in 2005 to slightly below 600 in 2015, being the third highest among five countries examined though. Greece and Italy shared the similar pattern regarding to the variation in the demand for cars, with increasing to reach the highest point in 2009, followed by dropping back to in 2015. In particular, the figure of Italy was higher by almost twofold than that of Greece, which was lowest in the chart with the number being no more than 400 cars per thousand people. In addition, decreasing from 900 cars in first year surveyed to about 850 cars in 2009, Germany saw to bounce back to almost 1000 cars in the year 2015, being more by over threefold than the smallest number in the chart at the same year, Greece' s.
The bar charts give information about the
car
ownership in 5
different
countries
in Europe
as well
as compare them with the figure of European average.

Overall
, the
number
of
cars
owned
in five
countries
fluctuated
slightly
. The highest
number
of
cars
in the three years surveyed
was possessed
by Germany as compared with other four
countries
and even the average
number
of entire European
countries
, which was around 700
cars
per thousand
people
.

While there was no
changes
in the
number
of
cars
per thousand
people
in France all the way with the
number
of 700
cars
, that of France
still
hold the second position
in comparison
with other four
countries
. Meanwhile, there was a steady decreasing in the
car
ownership from almost 700
cars
per thousand
people
in 2005 to
slightly
below 600 in 2015, being the third highest among five
countries
examined though.

Greece and Italy shared the similar pattern
regarding to
the variation in the demand for
cars
, with increasing to reach the highest point in 2009, followed by dropping back to in 2015.
In particular
, the figure of Italy was higher by almost twofold than that of Greece, which was lowest in the chart with the
number
being no more than 400
cars
per thousand
people
.
In addition
, decreasing from 900
cars
in
first
year
surveyed to about 850
cars
in 2009, Germany
saw
to bounce back to almost 1000
cars
in the
year
2015, being more by over threefold than the smallest
number
in the chart at the same
year
,
Greece&
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chars show the number of cars per thousand people in 5 different countries in Europe in 2005, 2009 and 2010 in comparison with the average number. v. 2

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258 words
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