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The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v.9

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 9
The table illustrates the sales produced by a coffee shop inside an office building in a regular weekday. It is clearly seen that the most peak time of the coffee shop is the early morning, which is 7: 30 to 10: 30 am. It is seen that the coffee shop obtains their highest sales during 7: 30 am to 10: 30 am with a 700 total sales volume followed by the next time shift, which is 10: 30 to 2: 30 pm, with a total of 530 sales. During the 5: 30 pm to 8: 30 pm time shift, the coffee shop' s sales stands a total of 465. On the contrary, the lowest products sell could be observed during the afternoon period, which is 2: 30pm to 5: 30 pm. However, evening time shift (5: 30 pm to 8: 30 pm) makes a better sale than the afternoon sales with 465 sales in total. Overall, coffee is the most consumed item in the coffee shop with about 8 hundred sales per day followed by pastries and sandwich sales with 600 and 400 respectively. The tea, on the other hand, is the least bought product, 270 cups in a day, by the consumers in a typical weekday. In summary, 7: 30 am to 10: 30 am is the most peak time of the coffee shop. Respectively, coffee is the most sought product in the shop and tea is the least bought product the consumers.
The table illustrates the
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sales
produced by a
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coffee
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shop
inside an office building in a regular weekday. It is
clearly
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seen
that the most peak
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time
of the
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coffee
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shop
is the early morning, which is 7: 30 to 10: 30 am.

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seen
that the
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coffee
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shop
obtains their highest
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sales
during 7: 30 am to 10: 30 am with a 700 total
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sales
volume followed by the
next
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time
shift, which is 10: 30 to 2: 30 pm, with a total of 530
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sales
. During the 5: 30 pm to 8: 30 pm
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time
shift, the
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coffee
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sales
stands a total of 465.
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, the lowest
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products
sell could
be observed
during the afternoon period, which is 2: 30pm to 5: 30 pm.
However
, evening
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time
shift (5: 30 pm to 8: 30 pm)
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makes
a better
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sale
than the afternoon
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sales
with 465
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sales
in total.

Overall
,
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coffee
is the most consumed item in the
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coffee
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shop
with about 8 hundred
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sales
per day followed by pastries and sandwich
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sales
with 600 and 400
respectively
. The tea,
on the other hand
, is the least
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bought
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product
,
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270 cups
in a day, by the consumers in a typical weekday.

In summary, 7: 30 am to 10: 30 am is the most peak
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time
of the
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coffee
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shop
.
Respectively
,
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coffee
is the most sought
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product
in the
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shop
and tea is the least
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bought
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product
the consumers.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 9

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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