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The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v.6

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 6
The table illustrates a typical weekdays’ sales of a coffee shop which is located in an office building. The sales of coffee, tea, pastries, and sandwich are shown in four times,   7. 30-10. 30, 10. 30-2. 30, 2. 30-5. 30, and 5. 30-8. 30. It can be clearly seen that the highest sale in a day was recorded for coffee. The best selling time is between 7. 30 am - 10. 30 am, when the sales of each item are the biggest, except for the sandwich. The sale of sandwiches is just 50 at that time. Coffee becomes a favourite menu for costumers in the morning and evening. The sale of this menu is the highest within 7. 30-10. 30 am and 5. 30-8. 30 pm, which is 265 and 200 respectively. The sales of sandwich become the highest at 10. 30 am -2. 30 pm period while coffee is in the second rank with 185 sales. At 2. 30-5. 30 pm, the sale of pastries is the highest among the menu. However, this number is under the morning sales of pastries which is 275. To sum up, coffee has the highest sales in a day. On the contrary, the sale of tea is the lowest. Early morning (7. 30 -10. 30 am) is the time when the number of sales is the highest.
The table illustrates a typical weekdays’
sales
of a
coffee
shop which
is located
in an office building. The
sales
of
coffee
, tea, pastries, and sandwich
are shown
in four
times
,
 
7. 30-10. 30, 10. 30-2. 30, 2. 30-5.
30
, and 5. 30-8. 30.

It can be
clearly
seen
that the highest
sale
in a day
was recorded
for
coffee
. The
best selling
time
is between 7. 30 am
-
10. 30 am, when the
sales
of each item are the biggest,
except for
the sandwich. The
sale
of sandwiches is
just
50 at that
time
.
Coffee
becomes a
favourite
menu for costumers in the morning and evening. The
sale
of this menu is the highest within 7. 30-10. 30 am and 5. 30-8. 30 pm, which is 265 and 200
respectively
. The
sales
of sandwich become the highest at 10. 30 am -2. 30 pm period while
coffee
is in the second rank with 185
sales
. At 2. 30-5. 30 pm, the
sale
of pastries is the highest among the menu.
However
, this number is under the morning
sales
of pastries which is 275.

To sum up,
coffee
has the highest
sales
in a day.
On the contrary
, the
sale
of tea is the lowest. Early morning (7. 30 -10. 30 am) is the
time
when the number of
sales
is the highest.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 6

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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