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The table below show information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category 2002. v.2

The table below show information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category 2002. v. 2
The given tabular representation depicts the proportion of national consumer expenditure on different goods in five different countries in 2002. At a first glance, it can be seen that the highest amount of money spent by Turkey on food, drink and tobacco that was 32. 14%. However Ireland was noticed at second position which spent 28. 91% money whereas Swedish people spent lowest money on food, drink and tobacco (15. 77%). furthermore these items got 16. 36% share from Italy and 18. 80% from Spain. Asserting further, it can be said that, clothing and footwear had highest share from Italy. Interestingly the other four countries remained between 5% and 6% respectively. Apparently in the case of leisure and education all countries Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey spent almost same amount of money ( 2. 21%, 3. 20%, 1. 98%, 3. 22%, 4. 35% respectively ). Overall, it is evident that, all countries spent maximum money on food, drink and tobacco rather then other goods.
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goods
in five
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in 2002.

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that the highest amount of
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by Turkey on food, drink and tobacco that was 32. 14%.
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Ireland
was noticed
at second position which
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28. 91%
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money
whereas Swedish
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people
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spent
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lowest
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money
on food, drink and tobacco (15. 77%).
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these items
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16. 36% share from Italy and 18. 80% from Spain.

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be said
that, clothing and footwear had
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share from Italy.
Interestingly
the other four
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countries
remained between 5% and 6%
respectively
.
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in the case of leisure and education all
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countries
Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey
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spent
almost same amount of
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money
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(
2. 21%, 3. 20%, 1. 98%, 3. 22%, 4. 35%
respectively
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)
.

Overall
, it is evident that, all
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on food, drink and tobacco
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then
other
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goods
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IELTS academic The table below show information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category 2002. v. 2

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165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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