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The graph shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in twentieth century. v.2

The graph shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in twentieth century. v. 2
The bar chart indicates how UK economy is affected as percentage by sectors such as agriculture, manufacturing, business and financial services over the period from 1900 to 2000 in twentieth century. It is seemed clearly that economic contribution of the business and financial services increased during the period whereas the manufacturing affection decreased on UK economy. Regarding as contribution of the agriculture, it fell from 1900 to 2000 except for the biggest contribution among all years in 1950. As regards the first, agriculture accounted for almost 50% of economic contribution in 1900 before climbing to roughly %53 in 1950. Furthermore, it experienced approximately %40 and %56 decrease sharply from 1950 to 1975 and 2000 respectively. In terms of business/financial services and manufacturing, it was evident that the manufacturing contribution declined gradually from %45 to %15 in contrast to steadily rising of the business and financial services from %4 to %35 steadily.
The bar chart indicates how UK economy is
affected
as percentage by sectors such as agriculture,
manufacturing
, business and financial
services
over the period from 1900 to 2000 in twentieth century.

It
is seemed
clearly
that economic
contribution
of the business and financial
services
increased during the period whereas the
manufacturing
affection decreased on UK economy. Regarding as
contribution
of the agriculture, it fell from 1900 to 2000
except for
the biggest
contribution
among all years in 1950.

As regards the
first
, agriculture accounted for almost 50% of economic
contribution
in 1900
before
climbing to roughly %53 in 1950.
Furthermore
, it experienced approximately %40 and %56 decrease
sharply
from 1950 to 1975 and 2000
respectively
.

In terms of business/financial
services
and
manufacturing
, it was evident that the
manufacturing
contribution
declined
gradually
from %45 to %15
in contrast
to
steadily
rising of the business and financial
services
from %4 to %35
steadily
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in twentieth century. v. 2

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151 words
6.5
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