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The table below provides a breakdown of the amount of different cereals produced vy several countries in Europe in 2000. v.2

The table below provides a breakdown of the amount of different cereals produced vy several countries in Europe in 2000. v. 2
The table illustrates the comparison of the amount of diverse types of cereals made by a few countries in the western and eastern europe. The breakdown depicted in the year 2000. Overall, while production of cereals in germany and france outnumbered manufacturing in belgium and Bulgaria by a significant margin, other selected counties take intermediate position. Obviously, common types of cereals, suchlike wheat and spelt, barley, has bigger production in the western and eastern europe in the year 2000, than barley. Not only Bulgaria has a small production of rye and maslin cereals ( 28 tonnes) but also belgium, that have not made any tonnes by the year 2000. With respect to common wheat and spelt, the least amount of the output was in belgium, reaching only 1, 919 tonnes. belgium have not manufactured many cereals at all, also producing the least amount of barley, only 400 tonnes. By contrast, 3, 854 tonnes were produced in germany, which are the most significant manufacturing of rye and maslin; meanwhile 37, 501 tonnes of common wheat and spelt were made in france, that making country the largest manufacturer of this type of cereals. Whilst germany and france produced the biggest quantity of barley, 11, 563 and 11, 775 tonnes respectively, counties, suchlike Czech Republic and Denmark, had almost similar output of various cereals.
The table illustrates the comparison of the amount of diverse types of
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cereals
made by a few countries in the western and
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eastern europe
. The breakdown depicted in the year 2000.

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, while production of
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cereals
in
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germany
and
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france
outnumbered manufacturing in
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belgium
and Bulgaria by a significant margin, other selected counties take intermediate position.
Obviously
, common types of
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cereals
, suchlike wheat and
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spelt
, barley, has bigger production in the western and
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eastern europe
in the year 2000, than barley.

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Bulgaria has a
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production of rye and
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maslin
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28 tonnes)
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belgium
, that have not made any tonnes by the year 2000. With respect to common wheat and
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spelt
, the least amount of the output was in
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belgium
, reaching
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1, 919 tonnes.
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have not manufactured
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at all,
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400 tonnes.

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were produced
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germany
, which are the most significant manufacturing of rye and
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maslin
; meanwhile 37, 501 tonnes of common wheat and
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spelt
were made
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france
, that making country the largest manufacturer of this type of
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. Whilst
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germany
and
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france
produced the biggest quantity of barley, 11, 563 and 11, 775 tonnes
respectively
, counties, suchlike Czech Republic and Denmark, had almost similar output of various
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.
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