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The chart shows the percentage of students at high school in the United States who regularly take part in certain sports. v.2

The chart shows the percentage of students at high school in the United States who regularly take part in certain sports. v. 2
The presented bar graph demonstrates data about proportion of students, divided by gender, who engage in five kinds of sports classified into baseball, basketball, table tennis, badminton and swimming at university in the US. The data is calibrated with percentage. The most striking feature to be observed is that, the sport with the most significant difference between genders is baseball and swimming. Baseball is also most popular sport for boys while the majority of girls prefer going swimming pool. Looking the data in more detail, it is clear that the most popular sport among boys is baseball, which participation rate reaches just under a half. A small minority of girls takes part in baseball, this is approximately 10%. More than a third of boys also enjoy playing basketball. With regarding to table tennis and badminton, more girls take part in these sports which shows a difference of about 3% and 16%, respectively. While nearly 40% of girls prefer swimming, fewer boys participate in this sport- about 20% compared to 40% of girls
The presented bar graph demonstrates data about proportion of students, divided by gender, who engage in five kinds of
sports
classified into baseball, basketball, table tennis, badminton and swimming at university in the US. The data
is calibrated
with percentage.

The
most striking feature to
be observed
is that, the
sport
with the most significant difference between genders is baseball and swimming. Baseball is
also
most
popular
sport
for
boys
while the majority of
girls
prefer going swimming pool.

Looking the data in more detail, it is
clear
that the most popular
sport
among
boys
is baseball, which participation rate reaches
just
under a half. A
small
minority of
girls
takes part
in baseball, this is approximately 10%. More than a third of
boys
also
enjoy playing basketball.

With
regarding to
table tennis and badminton, more
girls
take part
in these
sports
which
shows
a difference of about 3% and 16%,
respectively
. While
nearly
40% of
girls
prefer swimming, fewer
boys
participate in this
sport-
about 20% compared to 40% of
girls
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows the percentage of students at high school in the United States who regularly take part in certain sports. v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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