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More and more people ore using the internet to do their tasks rather then doing in person. (e. g. bonking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages? v.2

More and more people ore using the internet to do their tasks rather then doing in person. (e. g. bonking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages? v. 2
The rise and adaption of Technology is increasing significantly. The usage of internet have made the life of public easier, quicker and comfortable. These days masses opt to do their task online rather then approaching in person. If I asked, I tend to believe that it has more unproductive outcomes then being advantageous. This essay will highlight that the disadvantages of this approach surpass the benefits brought by it. Out of all the reason within my knowledge, the foremost one is, lack of knowledge and understanding in people. Majority of the population are in favor of using technology but, they are unaware of cyber crime activities. There are several cases in which people face frauds. For an instance, there are emails sent to the client which state of lottery wining, free cash bonus, gift hamper and in turn the criminal asks for bank details to transfer money. So in that case host is cheated. The other reason is the recovery of the failed transaction. There are certain ways to do online transaction for booking, banking but if, the transaction is not reached to the destination and the amount is debited from the account then the process to recover the amount is tedious. The other demerit in terms of shopping is receiving defective piece even if the demanded price is paid off. Buying the products or likely material must be examined and analyzed first. It gives customer satisfaction and also surety of receiving an original item. Furthermore, laziness have affected almost half of the population. Presently, people choose to work in their comfort zone which makes them inactive. If any shopping or bank inquiry is to be done, then preferring to walk nearby stores or branch increases the activity level in them. A small walk of mile or half can be productive for good health. However, I could not underestimate the fruitful outcomes caused due to internet. For an example, if transferring the amount is urgent or required to be done in limited time then, it can be completed with few taps on smartphones or computers. Bookings can be done by seeing the rooms. Hotel' s website have a facility of virtual tours which is due to enhancement in technology. Shopping can be done online by looking at the products and reading limited reviews. Hence, to recapitulate and offer my position, only limited, minimal and static amount of transaction should be done online. If there is any risk factor involved in transaction, then going in person and completing the task is wise decision.
The rise and adaption of Technology is increasing
significantly
. The usage of internet
have
made the life of public easier, quicker and comfortable.

These days
masses
opt to do their task
online
rather
then
approaching in person. If I asked, I tend to believe that it has more
unproductive


outcomes
then being advantageous. This essay will highlight that the disadvantages of this approach surpass the benefits brought by it.

Out of all the reason within my knowledge, the foremost one is, lack of knowledge and understanding in
people
. Majority of the population are in
favor


of
using technology
but
, they are unaware of cyber crime activities. There are several cases in which
people
face frauds. For an instance, there
are


emails
sent
to the client which state of lottery wining, free cash bonus, gift hamper and in turn the criminal
asks for
bank
details
to transfer money.

So
in that case
host
is cheated
. The other reason is the recovery of the failed
transaction
. There are certain ways to do
online
transaction
for booking,

banking
but
if, the
transaction
is not reached to the destination and the amount
is
debited from the account then the process to recover the

amount
is tedious.

The other demerit in terms of shopping is receiving defective piece even if the demanded price
is paid
off. Buying the products or likely
material


must
be examined
and analyzed
first
. It gives customer satisfaction and
also
surety of receiving an original item.
Furthermore
, laziness have
affected


almost
half of the population.
Presently
,
people
choose to work in their comfort zone which
makes
them inactive. If any shopping or bank inquiry is to
be


done
, then preferring to walk nearby stores or branch increases the activity level in them. A
small
walk of mile or half can be productive for
good
health.

However
, I could not underestimate the fruitful outcomes caused due to internet. For an example, if transferring the amount is urgent or required to
be


done
in limited time then, it can
be completed
with few taps on smartphones or computers. Bookings can
be done
by seeing the rooms.
Hotel&
#039; s website have
a


facility
of virtual tours which is due to enhancement in technology. Shopping can
be done
online
by looking at the products and reading limited reviews.

Hence
, to recapitulate and offer my position,
only
limited, minimal and static amount of
transaction
should
be done
online
. If there is any
risk
factor


involved
in
transaction
, then going in person and completing the task is wise decision.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS academic More and more people ore using the internet to do their tasks rather then doing in person. (e. g. bonking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages? v. 2

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