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The chart below shows the percentage of UK households with selected consumer durables between 1998 and 2005 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The chart below shows the percentage of UK households with selected consumer durables between 1998 and 2005
The table illustrates the percentage of households in the United Kingdom having consumer durables form 1996 to 2006. It can be clearly observed that, apart form telephone all other consumer durables gained popularity from 1996 to 2006. With regards to Internet connection, it stood at 10 percent in 1996 and then dramatically inclined and reached its zenith point around 60 percentage in 2006. Likewise, Mobile Phone experience a two fold increase to just above a half in 2006. Fridge comprises of almost a quarter remained relatively constant in both the years. In contrast, the usage of Microwave, Fridge and washing machine remained constant in in 1996 at about three-forth. The percentage of Microwave climbed to 80 percentile in 2006, up 10 percent from 1996. Compared to others, the situation of telephone was different. Having inclined in 1996, the percentage of telephone had fell to 88 percentage approximately. Overall, every durable witnessed an increase in 2006 except telephone. Although telephone faced a small reduction, it stood at the top.
The table illustrates the
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percentage
of households in the United Kingdom having consumer durables form 1996 to 2006. It can be
clearly
observed that,
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apart form
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telephone
all other consumer durables gained popularity from 1996 to 2006.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
Internet connection, it stood at 10 percent in 1996 and then
dramatically
inclined and reached its zenith point around 60
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percentage
in 2006.
Likewise
, Mobile Phone experience a
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two fold
increase to
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just
above a half in 2006. Fridge
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comprises of
almost a quarter remained
relatively
constant in both the years.

In contrast
, the usage of Microwave, Fridge and washing machine remained constant
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in in
1996 at about three-forth. The
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percentage
of Microwave climbed to 80
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percentile
in 2006, up 10 percent from 1996. Compared to others, the situation of
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telephone
was
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different
. Having inclined in 1996, the
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percentage
of
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telephone
had
Use the past participle "fallen", "felled" after the modal (auxiliary) verb 'had'.
fell
to 88
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percentage
approximately.

Overall
, every durable witnessed an increase in 2006 except
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telephone
. Although
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telephone
faced a
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small
reduction, it stood at the top.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of UK households with selected consumer durables between 1998 and 2005

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168 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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