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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40 44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981 v.3

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40 44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981 v. 3
The table shows that number of children born to women aged 40-44 in Australia from 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006. Overall, majority of women in Australia had Two Children in the given periods. There were merely different between Three Children and Four or More Children. Also, proportion of women had only one child and None were the least. It is evident that, in the given periods, women in Australia had Two Children with 29%, 35% 38. 2% and 38. 3%, respectively. In term of Three Children, there was a decline from 1981 to 2006 with 27. 4% to 21. 5%. Similarity, Australian women who had Four or more children had a significant fell from 27. 6% to 11%. Moreover, number of children ever born of Four or more children were significant dropped from 1981 to 2006 with 27. 6% to 11%. On the other hands, the trends of None and One child were increased. The proportion of One Child was 7. 6% while 8. 5% for None. Furthermore, the average of None and One child were increased merely 1% after 5 years while the proportion of Four or more Children was declined approximately 9%.
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born to
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women
aged 40-44 in Australia from 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006.

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,
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majority of
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women
in Australia had Two
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Children
in the
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given
periods. There were
merely
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different
between Three
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Children
and Four or More
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Children
.
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women
had
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only
one
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child
and
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None
were the least.

It is evident that, in the
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periods,
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women
in Australia had Two
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Children
with 29%, 35% 38. 2% and 38. 3%,
respectively
. In term of Three
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Children
, there was a decline from 1981 to 2006 with 27. 4% to 21. 5%. Similarity, Australian
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women
who had Four or more
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children
had a significant fell from 27. 6% to 11%.
Moreover
, number of
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children
ever born of Four or more
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children
were significant dropped from 1981 to 2006 with 27. 6% to 11%.

On the other hands, the trends of
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None
and One
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child
were increased
. The proportion of One
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Child
was 7. 6% while 8. 5% for
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None
.
Furthermore
, the average of
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None
and One
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child
were increased
merely
1% after 5 years while the proportion of Four or more
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Children
was declined
approximately 9%.
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IELTS academic The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40 44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981 v. 3

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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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