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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v.2

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v. 2
The table graph explicates the gathered statistics of children born to women aged from 40-44 years in Australia. The data is given since 1981 and it illustrates the figures of 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006. Overall, the proportion of women who had given birth to three or more children had considerably plunged and mothers who had no children were surged by each year. In 1981, the utmost four or more infants were born by women with the figures of 27. 6% but it was plunged from the year 1981 to 1996 and finally, it fell to 11. 0% in 2006. Similarly, the maximum proportion of women who had given birth to three children was 27. 4 percent and 27 percent in the year of 1981 and 1986 respectively. The remaining two years were minimal in the birth of three children by the women aged 40-44. Moreover, two children were given birth by more women in the year of 2006 and 1996. It was nearly correlative to each other with the figures of 38. 3% and 38. 2% while 29% of two children were given birth by women in the year of 1981. However, childless women’s number upsurged in 1996 and 2006 from 12. 8 percent to 15. 9% but women with no child plummeted from 9. 7 percent to 8. 5 percent in the year 1981. In the case of one child, the proportion decreased in the first two years of the given graph then dropped to 7. 6 percent in the last year.
The table graph explicates the gathered statistics of
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children
born to
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women
aged from 40-44 years in Australia. The data is
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since 1981 and it illustrates the figures of 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006.

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, the proportion of
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women
who had
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given
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birth
to three or more
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children
had
considerably
plunged and mothers who had no
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children
were surged
by each year.

In 1981, the utmost four or more infants
were born
by
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women
with the figures of 27. 6%
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but
it
was plunged
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year
1981 to 1996 and
finally
, it fell to 11. 0% in 2006.
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, the maximum proportion of
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women
who had
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given
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birth
to three
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children
was 27. 4
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percent
and 27
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in the
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of 1981 and 1986
respectively
. The remaining two years were minimal in the
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birth
of three
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children
by the
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women
aged 40-44.

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, two
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children
were
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birth
by more
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women
in the
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year
of 2006 and 1996. It was
nearly
correlative to each other with the figures of 38. 3% and 38. 2% while 29% of two
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children
were
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birth
by
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women
in the
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of 1981.
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, childless
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number upsurged in 1996 and 2006 from 12. 8
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percent
to 15. 9%
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but
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women
with no child plummeted from 9. 7
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percent
to 8. 5
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percent
in the
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year
1981. In the case of one child, the proportion decreased in the
first
two years of the
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graph then dropped to 7. 6
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in the last
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.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v. 2

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254 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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