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The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v.1

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v. 1
The given data shows the number of children born to 40-44 years old women in Australia for 4 different years. The number of women from 40- 44 years old who had either one child or none, increased over time while this number decreased for the women of the same age group who had two or more children. In 1981, the percentage of women in 40-44 years age group who has no children was 8. 5% and in 1986 this percentage increased slightly and reached to 9. 7%. The women of the same age group with one child were 7. 6% in 1981 and reached to 8. 7% 5 years later. The percentages of women who fall in the same age category with 2-4 and more children were much higher (approximately 28%). In 1996 and 2006 (with a 10 years interval) the percentage reached to over 15% for childless women while it reached to 13% for women with 1 child. The percentage of women with 2 children had very little change while the percentage for three of four children decreased over time. In summary, the women from 40-44 years old had more children initially and this percentage decreased over time.
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IELTS academic The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. v. 1

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