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The plans show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.3

The plans show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
The diagram depicts how the sports centre of a university will be transformed into hereafter. By now, the swimming pool which is 25 metres in length is right in the middle of the plan, surrounded by the room for altering clothes, seats for audiences and gymnastic room while the reception was placed opposite the entrance. Two outdoor courts were built to the West and the East of the middle building. In the future, the Gymnastic room will be extended by doubling the old one. The both outdoor courts are likely to demolish, the left one is projected to be another pool which will be named as leisure pool that will have its own changing room like the previous one. A sports store will be next to the new changing room. Regarding the right one, position for a sports hall will be behind the seating, which is likely to be in front of the two Dance studios that build near to each other, precisely. Besides, another changing room will be contrasted in the right corner of the plan and the café will possibly right in the left of the former. Apart from those changes, the 25m pool and its surrounding apartments will be tended to remain.
The diagram depicts how the sports
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centre
of a university will
be transformed
into hereafter.

By
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now
, the swimming
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pool
which is 25
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metres
in length is
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right
in the middle of the plan, surrounded by the
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room
for altering clothes, seats for audiences and gymnastic
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room
while the reception
was placed
opposite the entrance. Two outdoor courts
were built
to the West and the East of the middle building.

In the future, the Gymnastic
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room
will
be extended
by doubling the
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old
one. The both outdoor courts are likely to demolish, the
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left
one
is projected
to be another
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pool
which will
be named
as leisure
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pool
that will have its
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own
changing
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room
like the previous one. A sports store will be
next
to the new changing
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room
. Regarding the
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right
one, position for a sports hall will be behind the seating, which is likely to be in front of the two Dance studios that build near to each other,
precisely
.
Besides
, another changing
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room
will
be contrasted
in the
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right
corner of the plan and the café will
possibly
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right
in the
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left
of the former.

Apart from those
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changes
, the
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25m
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pool
and its surrounding apartments will
be tended
to remain.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The plans show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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