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Line graph-describing trendThe graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

Line graph-describing trendThe graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5.
The given line graph shows information about the passenger trips figure using three railways: the National Rail Network, London Underground and light rail and metro system in Great Britain, from 1950 to 2005. Overall, the three lines show variation. It is clearly to see that lots of people chose the national rail network or The London Underground, as at the start of the chart in 1950 there were a total of 1000 and 700 journeys taken, respectively. Then in the early 1980s the figures varied and later went down to about 600 by national railway and 500 by London Underground, but at the end they both increased to approximately 1000 at each. Meanwhile, there was a contrast in the number of people taking trips by light rail and metro system which was used later than the two remain, started from the early 1960s until now. There were just a few trips, less than 100 at first, then in 1980 mostly no one using this kind of transportation. The number of passengers, however rose slightly as nearly 200 journeys were taken in 2004/05. It is noticeable that British preferred the National Rail Network and London Underground than light rail and metro, and there were more and more people traveled by trains.
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information about the passenger trips figure using three railways: the
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National
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Rail
Network, London
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Underground
and light
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rail
and metro system in Great Britain, from 1950 to 2005.
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, the three lines
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show
variation.

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to
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that lots of
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people
chose the
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national
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rail
network or The London
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Underground
, as at the
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start
of the chart in 1950 there were a total of 1000 and 700 journeys taken,
respectively
. Then in the early 1980s the figures varied and later went down to about 600 by
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national
railway and 500 by London
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Underground
,
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but
at the
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they both increased to approximately 1000 at each.

Meanwhile, there was a contrast in the number of
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people
taking trips by light
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rail
and metro system which was
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used
later than the two remain,
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started
from the early 1960s until
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now
. There were
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just
a few trips, less than 100 at
first
, then in 1980
mostly
no one using this kind of transportation. The number of passengers,
however
rose
slightly
as
nearly
200 journeys
were taken
in 2004/05.

It is noticeable that British preferred the
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National
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Rail
Network and London
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Underground
than light
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rail
and metro, and there were more and more
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people
traveled by trains.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Line graph-describing trendThe graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
210 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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