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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v.2

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v. 2
The given bar graph gives data on the number of people living in urban areas in different continents of the world. The data are given for three different years, i. e. 1950, 2007 and projected for the year 2030. As is presented from the given data, initially in 1950, on an average 29% people of the world lived in the urban area. In this year, the highest percentage of the population lived in urban areas were in North America which was 64%. In Africa and Asia, these percentages were lowest (15 and 17 percentage respectively). Half of the Europeans lived in urban areas while this percentage was 42% in Latin America. After 57 years in 2007, the percentage of urban area population reached to 49% in the world. North America again had the highest percentage of the population who lived in urban areas. The lowest percentage was in Africa (37%) and in other continents, the percentages were around 40 to 70. The percentage of the population lived in urban areas increased significantly in 2007 compared to the percentages of 1950. It is projected that 60% of the world population would live in urban areas in the year 2030. This percentage would be more than 80 in both of the American continents. In Europe, this would increase to 78 and both in Asia and Africa around half of their population would live in urban areas. In summary, the percentage of people lived in urban areas increased over time and more and more people would be living in urban areas over time.
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. In this
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, the highest
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were in North America which was 64%. In Africa and Asia, these
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were lowest (15 and 17
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respectively
). Half of the Europeans
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while this
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was 42% in Latin America. After 57 years in 2007, the
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reached to 49% in the
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. North America again had the highest
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. The lowest
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was in Africa (37%) and in other continents, the
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were around 40 to 70. The
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of 1950.

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that 60% of the
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2030. This
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would be more than 80 in both of the American continents. In Europe, this would increase to 78 and both in Asia and Africa around half of their
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increased over time and more and more
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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