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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v.1

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v. 1
The column graph gives data on the growth of urban population in five different continents as well as in the world as a whole in three different years including the projection for the year 2030. Overall, percentages of global city-dwellers increased remarkably and a great ratio of the world population would live in cities in the future. As is obvious from the illustration, less than one-third global population lived in urban areas in 1950. The majority of this city-dwellers were in American and European continents while only 15-17% Asian and African were in municipalities. After 57 years, around half of the global population lived in cities and in Europe and America, this ratio went as high as eight out of ten. More than one-third African lived in urban areas in this year while it was slightly over 40% in Asia. It is projected that six out of ten persons in the world will live in urban areas in 2030. In this year more than 8 persons in every ten in America would be city living population while almost a same ratio would prevail for the European city-dwellers. In Africa and Asia, more than half of the population will start living in different cities.
The column graph gives data on the growth of
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15-17% Asian and African were in municipalities. After 57 years, around half of the global
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and in Europe and America, this ratio went as high as eight out of ten. More than one-third African
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more than 8 persons in every ten in America would be city living
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. v. 1

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203 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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